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Name: Imaduddin Nasution
Joined: Jan 31, 2015
Last Post: Apr 15, 2015
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Imaduddinnst   
Apr 15, 2015
Writing Feedback / Should fresh graduates continue their study to the next level? [2]

Nowadays it is better for young people to continue their study for master or doctoral degree rather than to work. To what extent do you agree or disagree on this statement. Put reasons for answer and kindly include any relevant examples based on your knowledge or experience.

Education is an investment for the future. Therefore, many graduates, in these days, are keen to continue their study to the next level (master or doctoral degree), instead of looking for a prestigious company to start their career as well as increase work experience. Although some people disagree with this development, I would argue that this positive trend will give some benefits for young people.

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Imaduddinnst   
Feb 11, 2015
Writing Feedback / One's success determines through rewarding career. People are choosing to change careers, why? [4]

Hi, Anfalia!

I have found a grammatical error from your essay.

The more people have work experience, the easier for them to obtain high level jobs.

I think it should be :

The more people have work experience, the easier for themthese peopleto obtain high level jobs

Because the irregular -er, -er structure has a pattern like (The -er/more + same structure, the -er/more + same structure, we have to use it correctly.
Imaduddinnst   
Feb 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / Start to develop the electric cars or solve the problem of transportation system? [3]

The proliferation of private cars on the roads in many parts of the world has led to serious problems of pollution and may contribute to global warming. Some people think that governments should spend money for the development of public transportation systems in order to help alleviate this problem. Others think it is better to spend money for the development of electric and other types of cars that may cause less pollution.

Do you think it is better for governments to spend money developing public transportation or developing new kinds of cars? Why or why not? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The serious air pollution problem caused by gas emission of nonpublic transportation in the whole world becomes the main factors of the global warming issue. Many people utterly recommend that the governments should take some actions like budgeting much money for the development of electrical cars which give few impacts of air pollution problem while others personally believe that to tackle this problem can be done by the governments who resolve the problem of public transportation systems. I would argue that in reducing global warming effects, solving the problem of transportation system is better than developing the electrical cars.

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Imaduddinnst   
Feb 9, 2015
Writing Feedback / Writing Task 2 : Public transportation still has possibilities to pollute environment [4]

Hi, AinunAlfatih!

I have some comments and some suggestion for your essay

Due toBecause / Since many people choose private cars

due to is a preposition, so it is to be followed by noun phrase

the number of private cars on the road increases significantly every yearsyear

the word, every, is to be followed by singular noun

Keep study, keep spirit AinunAlfatih!
Imaduddinnst   
Feb 1, 2015
Writing Feedback / Learning a foreign language will encourage the curiosity of children [5]

All children should study a foreign language, starting in the earliest grades. To what extent do you agree or disagree to this statment?

The first-grade children have to learn a language outside their own country. I personally believe that this situation has more positive than negative effects.

Critics to this idea claim that the lesson given to the youngest schoolchildren should be basic needs such as the formation of character, not a language outside their own country, because character formation of children will determine their behavior in the future whether they will be bad or good people. And this character formation becomes an obligation for parents and can be started by parents who show a respect when they meet their friends , for example, do not forget to say 'hello' to your friends. As a result, children will be well behaved and polite to everyone, especially to people that they have known. Therefore, character building is more important than studying foreign language for the youngest children.

On the other hand, supporters to this idea argue that language from other countries nowadays takes important part of the world. Taking English as an example, this language is the official language in a large number of many countries. Firstly, it is estimated that the number of people in this world that usually use English to communicate on a regular basis is 2 billion people. Thus, this number makes English becomes the most spoken language in the world. Moreover, many of the world's top films, books, and music are published and produced in English. Because of this, by learning English, the youngest schoolchildren will have access to a great wealth of entertainment. In addition, most of the content produced on the internet (probably around 50%) is in English. Consequently, knowing English will allow them to access to an incredible amount of information which may not be otherwise available.

To conclude, it is clear to me that although some people assume that other languages have not been an important lesson for the youngest schoolchildren in these days, I still maintain that languages will give more advantages than disadvantages for them. And I think that parents should give some stimulates such as learning foreign language to encourage their curiosity.
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