Scholarship / Your community involvement, leadership qualities, sporting, artistic and other achievements [2]

Growing up in a Syrian Christian family I was brought up with values that are more progressive than the ones seen in the other Indian communities. My parents valued diversity in knowledge ever since my childhood and made sure I was learning from different sources on the web, books and TV. Having lived for 17 years in culturally and racially heterogeneous Qatar, I learned to appreciate the various cultures of the world, enabling me to adapt to and learn from diversity. I tried to involve myself in team activities where I can get to interact with as many people from various backgrounds so I can keep learning about people. This interest helped me become an effective leader both in school and at work, proficient in certain extra-curricular activities, such as debating, quizzing, Model UN and online content writing, and involved in community service.

Supervising a team of 25 students and running school events as the Head Boy of my school, taught me how to manage people and resources since a young age. I further developed as a leader when I co-created and managed the Model UN event. Since I handled the marketing, my team promoted the event on online media and in different colleges, spreading word of the event among the Model UN community. I became the chief designer and editor of the conference newsletter, which kept all the participants updated on the developments of the event. Such experiences confirmed that I have the potential to become a manager as I learned to use these experiences in my professional life where I mentor many employees and do quality supervision of a team based in Bangalore.

Besides, I involved myself in community events since my school days as I believe, along with helping the society, one can see the value of people when they do service without looking for personal benefits. I have led my class in school to do mangrove plantation, beach cleanup and water conservation awareness program. This involvement continued in college as I became a member of the National Service Scheme and helped to carry out the plastic free campus initiative. Now when my company started it first CSR initiative 'Samaritan', I became one of the founding members.

Finally, I took up writing long content on the quora.com, which is a blogging and Q&A website. Though I started off writing in a lackluster manner, since the past year the quality of my content became tremendously better. My followers grew by almost 150% since January 2015. Besides in the past three months the total views my content had was around 1 million. Many of my articles went viral, especially my eulogy to a crusader against corruption trended for two days, getting around 13K upvotes and 350K views. Also another article on the defensive capabilities of Switzerland was published on the 'The Independent'.

If admitted to the college, I will bring my dedication to learn, enthusiasm in extracurricular activities, and a diverse experience as displayed in this essay, thus adding a dash of "masala" to the college community

Graduate / Questions and my answers for Bschool application- Australia [3]

There are 4 questions that the university wants me to answer. I have added all info below. Please critique these questions. Thanks in advance.
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1. Why have you chosen to study in Australia rather than your home country?

Asia is the region where most of the overseas operations of hi-tech, services and IT companies are based. Australia being a western economy yet surrounded by an Asian influence provides a very interesting environment for the people in the country. As the 21st century is considered the Asian century, Australia's presence in the APAC region provides a vantage point from where the country can easily involve itself in the growth that Asia will provide. Besides the presence of top notch universities in Australia, the diversity of ethnicity, nationality, faith and thought in Australia is something that I want to experience in the time I study. The amalgamation of break-neck development and utilization of technology with the presence of ample natural resources in Australia makes the economy a vibrant one, allowing for the quick growth of the services industry, which is the industry of my choice. Thus Australia in my opinion is the gateway for doing business in the Asia-Pacific region and would provide the best opportunity for someone who wants to learn how to do business in the region.

2.Why did you choose Bond University?

My profile has gaps in education that cannot be filled by continuing to work in my current career trajectory. Thus, to attain my short-term goal I need to learn various aspects of business management, especially marketing, and further strengthen skills, such as and networking skill. But after I had an informative interaction with ZZZZ XXX, who had recently graduated from the MBA program at Bond University, I realised how useful an MBA from Bond would be in achieving my career objectives. Thus I researched more on the university to find if it is a right fit with my ambitions.

Bond University being situated in an area with a favorable sunny sub-tropical climate is a big plus to me. Besides, Bond's strong emphasis on core courses will develop my theoretical knowledge on different functions as that is something I lack. Additionally having the business mentoring program, a feature not seen in other universities, would help me to begin the next chapter of my life as a business student in Australia. Finally, Bond's Link Seminars and Business Leaders Forums would help me learn trends and best practices of industry, and give insights into the corporate world through the eyes of an executive.

3. How do you believe your chosen program will contribute towards your current or chosen career path?

Until now, all the marketing and customer management experience that I have had were courtesy of circumstances in my personal and professional life, and an intuitive reaction to it. With my background, it is hard to break into a management role as I neither have the experience in marketing nor a business degree to help me make the change. This is where Bond's MBA program with marketing specialization comes in. Most of the best lessons I learned were when I saw real life examples for it. Therefore having case studies as a main aspect of the electives, is something that I really want to see in the program. In this case, Bond has subjects where case studies form a significant part of the pedagogy. By taking the right electives I can attain the education I need to attain my short term goal.

Studying the 'Marketing Strategy: Cases and Applications'- will provide an insight into solving real world business problems by helping me adapt the theories learned to different scenarios I will encounter as a marketing manager. Also I plan to take the Behaviour in Organisations as that course would help me develop into a great manager who can lead a cohesive team, helping me transform from a student into a manager with improved organizational capabilities. Having the likes of Prof. Amy Kenworthy, whose publications on team building , stress handling and workplace performance, teach the course gave me the satisfaction of knowing that I can have engaging discussions in the classroom.

4. Please outline career objectives and future ambitions and any experience you are able to bring to the class/cohort?

I believe I am made for the role of SVP of Marketing in a major IT services company, where I can establish the company's strategy and goals in the day to day operations of a company. This will involve working with different cross-functional teams, which include finance and sales, and measuring progress and adjusting processes accordingly, thus adding to the bottom line of the organization. After getting a MBA degree, I aspire to work as a marketing manager for a top firm such as Accenture. I hope to leverage the professional experience I have with the knowledge gained through MBA to work with services and IT industry clients, providing solutions such as boosting the 'Customer Experience' in sales. My career, providing marketing issues faced in the industry, will help me understand the various nuances of managing sales and marketing of a product or service, thus helping me transition into the role of SVP smoothly. Studying business in this globalized world requires not only immense knowledge but also diversity in experience and thought. In this case, I am fortunate enough to have a background that is personally and professionally diverse. Having grown up for 17 years in culturally and racially heterogeneous Qatar, I developed an outlook that is far removed from what is seen in India and the Middle East. My interactions with people from four corners of the world, including Arabs, Somalians, Americans, Scandinavians and Filipinos, taught me to value the diverse opinions that people would bring to the table.

My expertise in providing solutions to problems faced by customers in the supply chain network spread across more than 15 countries will allow me to contribute to team projects at Bond. With my earlier successes in changing the business processes and in doing quality analysis of the new team based in Bangalore, I can provide valuable insights to those students, who come from non- IT professional background. Besides my experience handling clients and HP teams across five continents along with my upbringing among diverse groups of people in the Middle East will help me give a unique perspective in the classroom on various topics that are more global in nature. When I studied in college I was always involved in various clubs, extra-curricular activities and events, and I plan on doing the same once I join Bond.

Graduate / Experience: developing processes and solving issues in client-HP network - SOI; Master of Management [2]

Statement of Intent- Master of Management

It should describe your personal motivation to undertake further study, and can include details of your personal circumstances as well as your life and work experiences. It should emphasise any aspect of your personal history that may enhance your application, including extra-curricular activity, community involvement, work experience, relevant personal characteristics and any outstanding achievements. (500 words)

Besides, developing processes and solving issues in client-HP network gave me a diverse work experience. Within three months of joining the company, I started working at a position that was a level higher than my contemporaries. I nowadays also handle certain 'change management' tasks where I implement the updates and also plan the weekly upgrade of the supply chain. I analyzed the major cause of the contract violations made by my team and advised changes in business process to higher-ups, reducing no. of violations by 40%. Despite these highlights, plus the ones in my resume, I have gaps in knowledge that cannot be filled by continuing to work in my current career trajectory. A business degree at this juncture, would be the next step in the realization of my career objectives.

In the long term, I aspire to be the VP of Operations in a major hi-tech company, where I can establish the company's strategy and goals in the day to day operations. Right after finishing MoM, I would work as a consultant for a top firm such as Accenture, where I would work with hi-tech and IT industry clients, providing solutions in operations such as making cost reduction program by offshoring, boosting the customer experience in sales, and redesigning the procurement of raw materials. I want to use my time to gain the experience in managing operations of a product or project, helping me transition into an executive role years later. To attain my short-term goal I need to learn aspects of business management, especially operations, and further strengthen skills, such as organizational capability and networking. This is where MBS comes in.

Through the core courses and the 16 electives, MBS allows me to tailor my curriculum such that I can learn about various functions, thus compensating for my inexperience, especially in operations. Having the likes of Dr. Vikram Bhakoo, whose expertise in outsourcing solutions and 3PL services in supply chain piqued my interest, in the faculty gave me the satisfaction of knowing that I can have engaging discussions in the classroom.

If admitted to the program, I will bring my dedication to learn, enthusiasm in extracurricular activities, and a diverse experience, adding a dash of "masala" to the MBS community. In conclusion, I'm interested in learning and developing business skills by utilizing the holistic approach to education at MBS, allowing me to become a well-rounded business graduate and achieve my career goals.

Faq, Help / Does my new essay have to be merged with my old one? [4]

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In the link above , my another new essay was merged into the old one. The old one is less than half the length of the new one. Only first two paragraphs are same in the 1st essay. The rest are all new info that I want to be reviewed.

Please unmerge the essay if it possible. I would lie to hear from you soon.

Thanks in advance.

regards

Graduate / SOP for Macquarie MBA must include points/info, work history, achievements, career goals, why MBA... [3]

SOP must include points/info on yourself, your work history, achievements, career goals , why MBA , why MGSM and expectations from the program. Lines that are in italics aren't part of the actual essay but rather are just added for the reader of essayforum to understand what points expected by the school is being made by me through the essay

On Yourself
Studying for an MBA in this globalized world requires not only immense knowledge but also diversity in experience and thought. In this case, I am fortunate enough to have a background that is personally, academically and professionally diverse. Having grown up for 17 years in culturally and racially heterogeneous Qatar, I developed an outlook that is far removed from what is seen in India and the Middle East. My interactions with people from four corners of the world, including Arabs, Somalians, Americans, Scandinavians and Filipinos, taught me to value a person's character and intellect and not judge anyone based on race, appearance and sexuality.

Leadership Achievements
Being a leader is a role that I have experienced regularly since a young age. Supervising a team of 25 students and running school events as the Head Boy of my school, taught me how to manage people and resources. I further developed as a leader when I co-created and managed the Model UN event. This experience confirmed that I have the potential to become a manager who can implement the vision and roadmap of a product (my event), supervise the launch and successfully market that product. In my professional life, I had the opportunity to further refine my leadership skill when I mentored many new recruits in my project. I am the youngest person in the account who was assigned the role of supervising the work done by a new HP team based in Bangalore, showing the trust both HP and Mphasis have in my leadership ability.

Work history achievements and its relation to my career
During college I decided that after sufficiently experiencing the various aspects of professional life I would pursue an MBA degree. As an engineer, I was the youngest person to represent my team in an inter-departmental upgrade where I coordinated with 10 different teams in enhancing the European and South American supply chain. I have compiled technical details of various HP and client teams and trained my team in using those to streamline communications, thereby reducing interactions by 30% that allowed for quicker implementation of solutions. I personally maintained a minimum of 95% fulfillment of key performance indicators and proactively advised the team to make sure that 90% fulfillment of such indicators was met. I analyzed the major cause of the contract violations made by the team and advocated change in process to higher-ups, reducing the number of violations by 40%. Such achievements in my work showed that I can actively work as management consultant improving client project's performance and streamlining business processes. After working for four years I realized that the time is now right for me to study business.

Career -Long term
My passion for products that paved way for the Internet era and interest to know how a market grows around such products have motivated me to seek out a business position in the tech industry. I believe I am made for the role of SVP of Product in a major hi-tech company, where I can establish the company's strategy and direction for the product portfolio. Whether the products are used to manage smart cities in India or conserve energy through smart grids in USA, I want to influence my company to pursue economically feasible opportunities in sectors such as home automation, healthcare and green tech. As the SVP of Product I will need to work and empathize with different cross-functional teams, which include operations, sales, and finance, and engage them appropriately in the decision-making. To do this I require the knowledge of how business is managed across functions of a company.

Career -short term
Hence after getting MBA, I aspire to work as a consultant for a top firm such as Accenture. I hope to leverage the professional experience I have with the knowledge gained through MBA to work with hi-tech and IT industry clients, providing solutions for business problems, such as risks of acquisition, weak operational performance and low market share. My career as a consultant, solving issues faced across different functions in the industry, will help me understand the various nuances of managing different functions, thus helping me transition into the role of SVP smoothly.

Why MBA
But my profile has gaps that cannot be filled by continuing to work in technical roles in my current career trajectory. To attain my short-term goal I need to learn various aspects of business management, including finance, strategy and marketing, and further strengthen skills, such as organizational capability, analytical knowledge and networking skill, as the consulting industry requires business graduates who have an all-encompassing knowledge in these areas.

Why the school
MGSM's strong emphasis on core courses will develop my foundation on different functions, including finance and strategy. Since I never learned marketing before, the 'marketing management' will allow me to scrutinize the marketing issues and suggest new changes to the marketing framework, bringing in profitability to the product. The 'STRATEGIC MANAGEMENT' can teach me how to make visual representations of problems and provide solutions based on the data. The 'MANAGING SUSTAINABLE ORGANISATIONS' will enable me to provide profitable solutions as consultant to my clients that would also have positive social and environmental impact. 'MANAGEMENT CONSULTING AND RESEARCH' will allow me to analyze a company's problem and advise strategic solutions for it, providing the hands-on experience I require by helping me adapt the theories learned to different scenarios I will encounter as a consultant. Besides my experience handling clients and HP teams across five continents along with my upbringing among diverse groups of people in the Middle East will help me give a unique perspective in the classroom on various courses that are more global in nature, especially the 'MANAGING WITH A GLOBAL MINDSET'. My expertise in providing solutions to problems faced by customers in the supply chain network spread across more than 15 countries will allow me to provide valuable insights to those students, who come from non- IT professional background, when I work in syndicate groups.

Closing
I believe my interest to learn and develop business skills by utilizing the holistic approach to education at MGSM and willingness to contribute to the MGSM community will allow me to become a well-rounded MBA graduate and achieve my career goals as mentioned in this essay.

Usually length is one page in A4 and this essay draft is currently a page and a quarter. Since I got many points to answers I stressed a bit on each point. Do give a critique and let me know where can I trim some words and sentences