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Posts by Dieu Anh
Name: Le Dieu Anh
Joined: Jul 17, 2015
Last Post: Jul 27, 2015
Threads: 3
Posts: 7  
From: Viet Nam
School: Nguyen Binh Khiem

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Dieu Anh   
Jul 27, 2015
Writing Feedback / Technology is not foster our business only but also make people's daily life easier. [5]

Hi Madanoli,

These are my suggestions about your essay.
I think you should use some transition words to connect sentences in one paragraph.
In the second paragraph, it is clearer if you give example about the technology's benefit in economy.
In the second place, business companies with automated technology are making more profit as compared to with manual technology. And you can link this sentence with the second one by because or since

As they need less staff, they will make more profit .

I hope it helps.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 27, 2015
Writing Feedback / 'high quality academic programs' - What is the reason of studying in the boarding school? IELTS [3]

Topic: Nowadays, sending children to boarding school is being increasingly popular. What is the reason? Do you think it is a positive development?

The number of boarding students now is on the increase. Although the fee is more expansive than it in the public school, many people now choose this type of school for their children because of several reasons such as adequate facilities for learning and relaxing, small classroom, special attention in each individual.

To begin with, the boarding school provides students with high quality academic programs and all modern conveniences for studying and entertaining. Teachers always wish to supply depth and breath of the academic courses to students and they are able to draw attention into every person

since the class size is very small, just from 10 to 15 people. In addition, it has amazing facilities and good services in both learning and relaxing, for example, a various range of sport equipment, well-stocked library, advanced laboratories, a building of art including a stage for performances, a movie theatre, galleries. After school, students can participate in their favourite sport clubs to stretch the body and make friends. Annually, they sometimes held some plays, dancing or singing performances to help students interact well with other people in different age. These things create many benefits for pupils to learn.

The boarding school is very good environment for students to train themselves to become successful people. Firstly, they go to this school to have the best preparation for university so that they focus on studying seriously. Being surrounded by diligent classmates, it is chance for them to practice and compete with the others to achieve highest scores. Secondly, going far from home is also an opportunities for them to live independently. It is time for them to learn how to cope with the live with their peer. Gradually, they have to be responsible more for themselves with every action. Hence, they know exactly the valuable of family and the independent life that is very crucial for them in adulthood. Despite just coming home on holiday, they still feel happy and comfortable since they live their own life in decent, secured residential houses and acquire useful knowledge everyday.

In conclusion, this positive trend will develop and become more popular in all over the world. It creates a new page of services and quality in education.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / It's more important to work at a job you enjoy , even if the salary is low. [4]

Hi Michele9,
In general, your essay is good but you should expand more in the 2nd paragraph such as giving a specific example for benefit of following passion when people find a job like you do in the 3rd one.

In the conclusion, you ought to write one or two more sentences as when I read it I feel you finish it hastily.
These are my suggestions and I hope it help.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 20, 2015
Writing Feedback / Opportunities when working in a team. No need to worry about negatives. [3]

Hi Yamigi,
I think you have good ideas about the topic, about the structure you should add up benefits into 1 paragraph and drawbacks into 1 paragraph. And If you want to start the 4th with "on the other hand", I think you should use "on the one hand" in the 2nd paragraph.

And this is my suggestion about the introduction:
Teamwork has become increasingly prominent in the workplace. Some companies have small groups to manage several products or tasks. Working in a team offers some benefits due to the collaboration among employees, but it also exist some drawbacks.

I hope it help.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / Education as a firm foundation of prosperous and functional person? IELTS [3]

Topic: The subjects and lesson contents are decided by then authorities such as the government. Some people argue that teachers should make the choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's world, people attach far more special importance to education as it is thought to be firm foundation of prosperous and functional person. Consequently, form and content of subject for students getting access subjects at the school become controversial. Many people support government in controlling it but several adversaries think it should be decided by teachers form those schools. In my opinion, subjects should be follow some rules from the authority with standards while teachers ought to make a decision about lesson what and how they need to do for their students so I disagree with this statement.

Almost knowledge at the school is immutable so I think every subject has to be put in a stable structure. As a result, the government has a departure to monitor and write some standards to follow in individual ones. Take history - an unchangeable subject about content as an example, it is necessary to know what and how people should teach as there are enormous historic events that they do not where they ought to start. However, it does not mean that the authority need write and print books for teacher and student since it is unreal if the whole country uses the same types of book whilst there are many differences in living conditions.

In many foreign countries, the teacher can choose material to teach from a variety of books and they do not have to follow any particular books. This is fit for students' ability and helps them to be more active in teaching. According to this way, they achieve high effective in lessons and students need to select information from those books, hence they know exactly what they are learning. In addition, it saves a huge amount of money for the government not to edit and print books for the schools.

To conclude, I am of the opinion that the authority should not interfere deeply in the teaching program. It is better if teachers and students are able to work according to the reality and their capacity.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / Should Censorship exist or not? [3]

This is my idea and I hope it helps.

It is becoming increasingly difficult to impose censorship (collocation) on the internet. In a world where various types of censorship is prevalent such as political where the government holds back information from citizens which they don't wish to reveal or religious censorship where the customs of one group may conflict with the views of another. Media censorship is a concerning problem because of censored lines in movies or maybe the lyrics of your favourite song (media includes more, not only music and movie so I think you ought to take more example). Censorship has been an ongoing trend for generations as well as generations to come making it even more difficult to advance in the expanding world of media, culture, politics, etc. In my opinion censorship should be dismantled.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 19, 2015
Writing Feedback / College students should base their choice of a field of study on the availability of jobs [3]

This is my idea about your essay.

Intro: Some people believe that students must merely take into account their talents and interest when choosing their field of study. Contrary to this popular belief, some opponents say that students should base their choice of study on the availability of jobs. In what follows the main reasons posited by both groups are first discussed and then my own position would be delineated.
Dieu Anh   
Jul 17, 2015
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Task 2 Studying in a university or working as a builder. Discuss both view and give opinion. [NEW]

Topic: Some people think young people should go to university to further their educations, while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

These days, studying in university become a trend of many countries because of several reasons such as a high salary job, desire of higher education or parents' force. However, others choose to become apprentices such as a tailor or a worker, consequently, some people think it is unnecessary to vie with each other to study in a well-known university. From my point of view, studying or working after high school graduation depends on the ability, the economic condition and the desire of students.

Every successful person appreciates university since it trains and guides a student academically to become a wise and functional person with the country in general and family in specific. Moreover, higher education is supposed to be the minimum level for whom want to obtain a firm standing in the society and it provides people with numerous benefits, opportunities to do researches, chance to access a rich resource of academic knowledge for example. As a result, parents always hope their children can become a part of a famous university because of belief in a bright future forward. Not only do parents think, but some students also desire to acquire far more knowledge from well-known professors.

However, some adversaries want to live with their own passion which is not studied from a university or may be do not have enough money to afford to university fee so that they choose other ways to enjoy the life. Now, many prosperous businessmen without university certificate can mature by their passion, energy and effort. In addition, if someone is able to study in university they can choose other appropriate jobs to earn money. In contrary, someone determines wrong major to follow, they may regret after studying and dishearten this major and it leads to some negative consequences subsequently.

To conclude, I am of the opinion that university is an academic place where students can learn and get a sterling degree for a high salary job, but it someone does not go to university, they can decide to follow their own way to never regret what they did. No matter what they do or study, they need to be satisfied with their choices as in the life everyone have to live their own life without allowance of anyone.
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