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Name: Maulana
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ranuarga   
Jun 23, 2020
Scholarship / [AAS] Explaining study choice essay [5]

@juliandika
you need to be more details in explaining course and university choices. Relate it with what you want to achieve after you finish study
ranuarga   
Jun 23, 2020
Scholarship / AAS- Choice of Course and Institutions-- Digital Law Course [2]

Hello there...
Please kindly review my essay for Australia Award Scholarship to answer question Choice of Course and Institutions

Explain your education choice



As a state-owned bank, xxxx bears responsibility to contribute to the national economy growth by providing banking services for almost all segments in various sectors. But with the digital transformation era, banking industry faces tough challenge from new competitors and new models of cyber crime. It's not only the IT and business team in the company that should be aware of this transformation, but supporting teams including legal team should also put the digital transformation as their focus to support the business by improving policy and regulatory to prepare readiness in this new era of business.

On that basis, I applied to Masters of Law program (LLM Course) at University of Melbourne. I prefer this course because it offers a wider range of law subjects than the specialized law course. It gives me chance to take various subjects of law that I believe will give me a comprehensive understanding to the law theory and practice, since my work requires me to understand not only banking and financial law, but also the law for the industry's ecosystem. This course at University of Melbourne offers subjects that can fulfill my needs. For example, Financial Services Law subject will enrich my understanding of financial services law itself, while Regulation of Fintech and Competition of Digital Markets subject will give me new knowledge and skill about the future of financial industry that will add value to my contribution to the company.

My experience in handling legal matters in various financial industry sectors has strengthened my legal knowledge and gives me a deeper understanding of banking and financial law as significant addition to my basic knowledge of law I obtained in bachelor degree. I have been involving in legal advisory for operational branch, project financing for various industry sectors, corporate actions, and litigation (procedural law) as well. This background and experience will get me the advantage to be succeeded in taking the course.

[SHOULD I ALSO PUT REMARKS THAT I ALREADY HAVE LETTER OF OFFER FROM THE UNIVERSITY AS ONE OF THE REASON OF MY CHOICE?]
ranuarga   
Jun 23, 2020
Scholarship / AAS 2020 : how the scholarship helps me to be more global-minded? [3]

@apk28
I think yo need to go into more details.
Better follow the pattern:
1. what your firm needs from its people?
2. do you have the requirements needed by the firm?
3. how the study will help you to contribute to the firm's needs
ranuarga   
Jun 23, 2020
Scholarship / Changing world - Why did you choose your proposed course and institution*? [6]

@zozoloi
this is a strong statement of a background and condition description.
The thing is:
1. You put too many data that make this writing seems like a short research, you should put more personal touch to this essay
2. You did not answer the question. you should explain at least briefly about your preferred course and the university and explain the reason why you choose it.
ranuarga   
Oct 18, 2019
Scholarship / My personal and team goals - Leadership Essay for Chevening [3]

@Maria
Hi Maria, thank you for your feedback, yeah it's been 4 years since I last made a thread here, been busy doing this and that... :)

Actually in the first paragraph I try to write a "punchy" start but I don't expect it turns out to be odd. So what you mean is that I must create a better bridging to the content? If so, could you help me show me the example?

In latter parts I describe my leadership experience starting from condition zero, follows by what I did, and sum up with the result. Does your advice says that I must focus on trait I acquired rather than results came from what I did?

Looking forward to hear from you more

Regards,
ranuarga   
Oct 15, 2019
Scholarship / My personal and team goals - Leadership Essay for Chevening [3]

Dear all, really need your help to review and give insight to my Chevening Leadership Essay as follows:

In 2016, Leicester City Football Club remarkably won its first English Premier League title in the club's history. Claudio Ranieri, the manager, led such a small club to a sensational triumph, which many people considered as impossible. I admire his kind of leadership style that could influence other and lead them from unfortunate situation to a beyond imagination success.

Since I was in school I have been showing this capability to influence and lead other to success. When I was a president of outdoor club in high school, I shifted club's focus from only preserving nature to developing club's competitive outdoor sports. This was done by registering club to national outdoor sports federation and arranging joint practice with certified instructors. This effort brought championship medals for club and school in several regional and national competitions.

In university I was actively involved in some voluntarily activities in natural disaster-affected regions such as Yogyakarta. Here, I became a lead surveyor and was given responsibility to absorb aspirations from people in earthquake-affected villages regarding their needs for survival and recovery. I was also appointed as field coordinator in post earthquake trauma healing program for elementary school students called Buku Untuk Sekolah (Books for School) in Kalasan region Yogyakarta. These programs succeeded to recover the psychological aspect of the earthquake affected people after disaster.

After graduated from law school in 2009, I worked in one of the biggest banks in Indonesia, Bank Mandiri. Here, I was appointed by the director to become his executive assistant. In this role, my responsibility was to give some advices to the director and deliver the director's ideas and initiatives to the middle management. In this role, I learned not only to be a messenger, but also elaborate what director needs to be manifested by middle management.

Furthermore, as a legal counsel, I have been doing a lot of work that taught me about leadership, specifically to lead in a discussion and provide legal advices for the business unit before they took business actions. The most recent event was my appointment as a team leader in criminal litigation department, leading officer and clerks to handle criminal litigation process which involves bank or its employees, which is challenging. There were several times when my sub-ordinates lack of motivation in work which affected to their productivity. However, I, as their manager tried to solve the problem by approaching them and telling them that their part of work was a big contribution to the success of the team, even for the company. This would make the employees feel important and resulted in better productivity.

In addition, I was assigned by the company to assist Indonesia Ministry of State Owned Enterprise (SOE) in drafting The New Law regarding SOE for 6 months in 2007. During this assignment, I was able to show the capability to influence bureaucrat's mind set in drafting law, and shifted it from theoretical and academic approach to effectiveness in implementation approach.

These experiences of mine, justified that I am influential for other people not only to reach my personal and team's goal, but also to lead them reach their personal goal.
ranuarga   
Oct 15, 2019
Scholarship / Self-leadership and resilience - foundation of being a good leader [3]

@NN2020
First, good luck on your Chevening application

Your elaboration on self-leadership is strong in this essay, however, since you also mention this: "leadership is about leading yourself and others to achieve the shared objectives", you also have to elaborate more in lead others. Your role as Assistant Manager could be deeper told and give some examples to show your leadership role
ranuarga   
Oct 15, 2019
Scholarship / FOR ME, LEADERSHIP IS ABOUT TEAMWORK / CHEVENING SCHOLARSHIP [4]

@ConnieG315
First, good luck for your application for Chevening.

Here are some of my thoughts after reading your essay:
1. I think it is better for you to explain about unfamiliar abbreviation, not only mentioning it, like MPME and XOF
2. The 2nd paragraph is the strongest content of your essay, however you need to break it down and narrate it better by starting from what you did was nothing, and then what step you took, until the success was reached

3. The "hook" in your first paragraph is interesting, but after that, it doesn't well elaborated in the next paragraphs
ranuarga   
Nov 1, 2015
Scholarship / LEADERS BORN NOT MADE - Chevening essay about Leadership and influence [4]

LEADERS ARE BORN NOT MADE



Dear fellows, please kindly check my essay about leadership and influence to be submitted as a requirement for chevening scholarship. There are so many things I would like to tell in this essay, so it results exceeded 500 words max. Please review it on grammar, and what to take out and what to add. Very appreciate for your help. Thanks in advance!

There is a common adagium stated that leaders born, not made. Well, based on my life experience, I agree with that adagium. Since I was a child, I was shown two types of leaders : a born leader and an artificial one. I refer a born leader to my oldest brother, yes my older brother because my father passed away when I still 4 years old, so since then he became the leader of the family. Since he was in college, he earned money to support the life, the education, and even the pleasure of his 6 siblings and our at home mother. When my mother attacked with the stroke disease 7 years ago and forced her to bed rest because the whole left side of her body had been paralyzed, my oldest brother support my mother's treatment and medication. From this story, I can conclude that my oldest brother was a born leader and since then he has being my role model to become a leader. Unfortunately, he was passed away last year because of heart attack.

The artificial leaders I met in my life were some of my school teachers and some of my managers at the office. I believe that a good way to lead is to give example in doing something, not to order his/her submission to do something without any real example of doing. Some of my teachers and managers are became leader because of his/her position, obligation, and status. In addition, they were given leadership training, so they were obliged to do some leadership because they get paid to lead not because of their willingness and passion.

Based on my view above, I can categorized myself as a born leader. Since I was in elementary school until high school I used to be appointed as a class chairman based on my style in giving example to my classmates of how to follow a lesson and how to act properly in class. Despite of my status as a class chairman, I could still managed to be the best student in school for 6 years in a row in elementary school, a year in junior high school and 3 years in high school. In high school I showed leadership capability by becoming the chairman of school's nature lover and outdoor activity club while I could still managed to do my duty as member of class representative board for school. As a chairman of outdoor club, I led my club-mates to plan and execute programs for the club, also led the team when there was an expedition trip to forest or mountains. It shows that I capable to lead not only in school environment but also in outdoor environment such as forest and mountain.

Based on my previous leadership experience, I felt that I still have to learn to be a better leader, so in university I joined LK2 FHUI (Scientific Study club of Faculty of Law University of Indonesia). In this organization I learned about how to lead the discussion, where it's not only about delivering my own opinion, but also listening and taking good and relevant points of others. It's not purely skill to develop but in addition, it's an art of leading a discussion to result the best solution to problems.

After graduated from law school in 2009, I began to work in the biggest bank in Indonesia based on asset. Here, there are so many leadership lessons to take. My first position is assistant manager in change management office where my key responsibility is to make sure the business and organizational transformation in the company is in line with the company needs to boost the income for the country since the majority shareholder of the company is Republic Indonesia government. My job here was not suitable with my education background, but that made me push myself harder to learn something new. I think I succeed to learn this new thing, because later I was appointed by the director to become his executive assistant. In this role, my responsibility was to gave some advice to the director and deliver the director initiatives to the middle management.

After 2 years in this place, i requested to move to Legal Group because since the beginning my passion is in law field. So from then until now I become senior manager, I have been doing a lot of work that taught me about leadership, specifically to lead in a discussion and to make sure that all the legal advice were accepted by the business unit before they took the business actions.

So yes, leader born not made because I never took leadership or management class but people can see me and trust me to be their leader.
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