Writing Feedback / Men have much more leisure time than women. Cambridge IELTS 2 Test 2 Writing Task 1 [4]

Generally speaking, it can be seen clearly from the data that men spend much more leisure time than women.

***small change, great essay overall

Writing Feedback / MERITS AND DEMERITS OF REFRIGERATOR AND WASHING MACHINE [2]

There are many disadvantages that the use of customer goods like as This essay iswill explain both of these situations.

People can do their tasks very easily without spending excessive time

Many people can store a lot of foods in refrigerators for the long run, so they do not have to go shopping for food regularly.

...because they put all their clothes inwashing machines which washes clothes based on specific programs.

For example, due to the fact that I have a washing machine,I was able to compressed schedules during mysummer and I can change my spare clothes regularly without worrying aboutthe shortage of clean clothes and spending a lot of time to wash them, because i have washing machine.

On the other hand... foods (food not foods, never put s after food)

the vitamins and proteinsin food may getdestroyed.

It is obvious that people have to eat the same food for a period of time, which causes the same routine for a stressful life. Having different food colors our life.

It is obviousthat washing machines consume a lot of energy which can be saved if people wash their clothes by hands. Especially when people need to wash onepiece of clothing and cannot wait to gather many clothes to turn on the machine.

because they wasteamount ofenergy.

refrigerators may change the taste of food, resulting in the loss of its nutritional value.

Writing Feedback / IELTS TASK 2 - Clothes as a significant sign of the tendency what people are like [2]

Clothes help to protect [i]our bodies[/i]

A 2015 recent study by Renata Rim asa psychologist

...who have different favorite clothes and fashion style have different personalities

more likely to be easy-going;

while people who dressedelegantly

...and Management published in 2013 shows researchers carrying out the research

It is imperative that choice of dress style should be carefully (add a verb here) eg. decided?

Writing Feedback / IELTS Task 2: The most important factors of happiness. Is it a job you love doing? [2]

people who love to draw and design choose to enter fashion industry, in which they can get salary to meet their daily needs while doing the occupation they love.

someone also can be elated bydoing simple activities like entertainment. To illustrate, employees can enjoy their leisure timeat home and be pleased.

I would claim that this is not the predominant factorthat (always use which after a comma) determine enjoyment. It is imperative for all human beings to find the significant cues of happiness, and these cues should not be dependent on one particular reason.

Undergraduate / Why Yale? The academic resources at Yale far surpass the resources available at Vanderbilt. [6]

The residential colleges are the biggest nonacademic reason that Yale appeals to me. Draws my interest (appeal is for food)

Also, try talking why Yale is a good fit for YOU. The university already knows how awesome they are, but they want to know how you think of them and what you can bring to the school. Decent essay but try emphasizing more on yourself.