aviniwirastri [Contributor]
May 22, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS - Technological advances in learning methods [3]
hi zarnovi
paragraph 1
I would argue thatdirectly attendattending the general lecture directly will deliver much more benefits.
paragraph 2
On one hand, viewing lectures via internetits becomes more efficient and effective since it was is portableeasy to access everywhere.
... to assist student in self study practice,wherewhich students can ...
... for example, students obtainto have instant solutions towards their problems in understanding the study materials,.itsit is related to online learning that provides the access to all resources of traditional course and ableallows us to attend in different courses.
... students learn how to make friends, to be patient, and especially to compete.
paragraph 3
Class attendancehavehas variety of ways to facilitate learning practice.
Firstly, many studentshadhave already understandunderstood the materials whether from internet or online access, behalf attending the class , instructor may go over (...) that apprentices hashave never seen before.
Secondly, classroom environment provides a discussion among the pupils, which countereds teacher with questions to enhance critical thinking skills. Finally, participating in class increases personal development of the pupils,wherewhich they can interact (...) to form study groups, or meet other students in related major.
comments :
your sentence structure does not clearly point out what you really mean.
you have to learn how to use appositive in order to modify the main point.
make sure you recognize the word classification (verb transitive, verb intransitive, noun, adjective and adverb) before starting to write.
re-learnt any functions of adjective clause conjunction. (who/that/which/where/when)
problems with singular and plural frequently occur, so you need to be more careful when writing.
In conclusion, online learning should be seen due toas something that provides studentsin a way of efficiency, effectiveness, and other merits regradingregarding students' self- study assistance. However, I would suggest that participateing in the class gives more advantages to student with the facility which does not exist by online learning.
comments :
task response : i think you've answered all of the task required.
coherence and cohesion : enough. but you need to explore more about using linking words as well as developing your idea more. go online and try to find some specific data needed, so your supporting idea will be rich.
nice try.
keep writing dude! -)
hi zarnovi
paragraph 1
I would argue that
paragraph 2
On one hand, viewing lectures via internet
... to assist student in self study practice,
... for example, students obtain
... students learn how to make friends, to be patient, and especially to compete.
paragraph 3
Class attendance
Firstly, many students
Secondly, classroom environment provides a discussion among the pupils, which counter
comments :
your sentence structure does not clearly point out what you really mean.
you have to learn how to use appositive in order to modify the main point.
make sure you recognize the word classification (verb transitive, verb intransitive, noun, adjective and adverb) before starting to write.
re-learnt any functions of adjective clause conjunction. (who/that/which/where/when)
problems with singular and plural frequently occur, so you need to be more careful when writing.
In conclusion, online learning should be seen due toas something that provides students
comments :
task response : i think you've answered all of the task required.
coherence and cohesion : enough. but you need to explore more about using linking words as well as developing your idea more. go online and try to find some specific data needed, so your supporting idea will be rich.
nice try.
keep writing dude! -)