Writing Feedback / A good leader needs to have clearly defined principles and should not change his beliefs [2]

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Q: Agree or Disagree, a leader should have strong opinions and should not change his/he opinions.
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I agree with the statement. I think a good leader should have a strong opinion and should not change his opinions. Below are three reasons to support my claim.

To begin with, I believe that a great leader will think comprehensively before he conveys his opinions and views instead of changing the words what he said after he put his words out. For example, if a company is going to make a mobile app, the leader of the group needs to prepare a lot of data and appropriate strategies for the project, then group member can follow the plan and complete a perfect program. Thus, a successful product will always be made by a group that have strong strategies and views, all of these decisions making is a job of the leader.

For another reason, I think that a powerful leader should have a careful personality, so that his partners can trust every decision what he made and regard his words in their minds. For instance, if a leader always says his opinions without thinking and changing all the time, it represents that the leader isn't a careful person, and he might lead a group to the wrong way and will let a project to fail in the end. Therefore, to become a good leader, thinking in a careful way can enable the leader not to give the wrong opinions to his parters and consequently achieve the goal.

Last but not least, I would argue that to being a group of the leader, he should take responsibility for his group. Take myself for the example, one time I ran a project at my company, the leader of the project just quitted suddenly during the process. As a result, my project failed at the end and because of the fail, I was kicked out of the company.

In sum, I firmly believe that a good leader should have a strong opinion and shouldn't change their words after they made a decision. Giving strong opinions can always show the personality of a good leader and can enable the project to approach successful.

Writing Feedback / Some historical events caused many effects on my country and forced people to change their behavior [3]

What historical event in your country has had a major effect on your country? Give reasons and examples to support your response.

Some historical events caused many effects on my country and influenced people to change their behaviors after the events. Though my country might lose lots of by those events, which also improved our government of policies. There are two events impressing me deeply, which I will explore in the following essay.

The first event we called Jie-Zeng incident is that a man named Jie-Zeng killed many people randomly in a carriage on the Metro Rapid Transit. It hasn't been a long time to happen this kind of frightening incident that someone killed people in a public area. The event become the most crucial news for a period of time, people cared about the result of this man and wondered weather the man would be sentence to death or not. Consequently, the man was judged to death as we thought but the incident though had a serious influence on a few people. For example, two more killing incidents happened after Jie-Zeng incident, when police asked the killers for the motives of the incidents, they all claimed that they just wanted to mimic the behavior of Jie-Zeng.

Secondly, another one significant event called Sunflower Student Movement is that our country's legislature passed an act by a black-box operation, which mean passed only in just thirty seconds without presented details. As the act would seriously impact not only our economy but also our politics, many students from college went on strike for canceling the act, taking to the streets and occupying the legislature up to twenty-four days. Although the leader and two hundreds of students of the movement were sentenced to the jail, there was a positive change along with the event. For Instance, a mayoral election of the capital was held after the event, many depressed people decided not to vote for a mayor. However, lots of students return to hometown due to the election, they realized that being a responsible citizen is important, thinking that if government couldn't do their duty well, people should supervise by themselves. As a result, there was the first time that a commoner without any party affiliation was elected to be a mayor because of students stood out to display their stance for the election.

Taking into account all aforementioned statements, these historical events has had major effects on my country including advantages and disadvantages. Moreover, people can always take a lesson from events and government is able to revise their policies to better ways. We might think that historical event gave us many losses, but it also progressed our country to become more successful.

Writing Feedback / Discuss the advantages of team sports and individual sports, indicate which you prefer? [2]

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Some people prefer to play team sports, while other prefer to play individual sports. Discuss the advantages of each. Then indicate which you prefer and why?

There are many advantages for both individual sports and team sports. In my opinion, I would prefer to play a game with partners rather than play alone. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

To begin with, when athletes choose to participate in individual sports, they might encounter some training that helps them to become a stronger person. First reason of all, playing a game alone enables players to develop a disciplined mind. Secondly, an independent athlete could learn how to think things in a big picture. For example, table tennis is a sort of sports that competing in a way through one on one. Players need to adjust their state to the best mode whether they got frustrated or not, the fact is that nobody will cheer you up during the competition. In addition to, coach won't stand beside the court and give you an advice, and players should try to manage a comprehensive strategy by themselves.

Moreover, if athlete chooses to play with partners that can also enables them to get a lot of advantages. First, players can make numerous friends from a group, and some of those friends might become a closest friend in a life. Second, working with partners helps a person to develop the skill of collaboration. For instance, basketball is a sport played by two teams of five players. However, each person has its own characteristic and specialty, coach will put all players in a different position to balance their ability, and teaches them how to collaborate with partners. Then, players will be asked to spend a plenty of time on training together. Consequently, they fight side by side on the competition, the most important thing is that no matter the result is win or not, they all obtain a valuable experience.

Last but not the least, in my opinion, I would prefer to play team sports. As I am a person who has a strong emotional and adventurous personality, I love to make friends, what makes me feel not lonely. Besides, I like to learn a new skill that I have ever done. For example, I have joined in a basketball team when I was a teenager. We have participated in a lot of competitions and I have spent half of time in my high school to play basketball. As a result, I have learnt widely useful skills that I lacked through the competition and my diversity of partners. Furthermore, these experiences also become an important part in my career.

In conclusion, taking into all aforementioned statements, both team sports and individual sports have numerous advantages. For me, I once again reaffirm that if I have one more chance to choose which sports I prefer to join, I won't hesitate to choose team sports.