Writing Feedback / The number of fliers who use three main airports in New York City - IELTS Writing Task 1 [3]

The bar chart depicts the number of fliers who use three main airports in New York City to travel during a 5-year period from 1995 to 2000. Overall, most of the time travelers were usually airborne from LaGuardia airport. However, travelers were more infrequent departed from Newark airport

A further look to the data between 1995 and 2000, LaGuardia passenger's number growth gradually from 35 percent to 70 percent within 5 years. Likely, Newark airport reveals the improvement from 1995 to 1998 and continued stable to the end of of period. While the figures for John F. Kennedy airport fluctuated between 28 per cent and 48 per cent.

However, the number of fliers at John F. Kennedy airport are able to surpass the number of LaGuardia airport in 1997 as the highest percentage in an average among the remaining airports. Indicates inconstant proportion peaked by 48 per cent in 1997 compares to LaGuardia airport nearly at 34 percent. There was no significant challenges by Newark passenger's number towards their constant percentage.

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Writing Feedback / The number of user who access differently to the two new music sites - IELTS Writing Task 1 [4]

The line graph presents the number of user who access differently to the two new music sites measured within 15 days. Overall, it can be seen that the most popular music website visited by user is Pop Parade website, while Music Choice website becomes more competitive in just couple days.

A closer look from data at the first day to seventh day, more user attempted to access Pop Parade website rather than Music Choice website in corresponding time. Nevertheless, reduction of visitors still occur by the end of period on day 7, where at starting point on day 1 approximately from 120.000 drop to 38.000 visitors. During the same period of time, the figure for Pop Parade website decreased slightly about 20.000 within seven days.

Eventually, by the last period on day 15, the number of Pop Parade visitors hit a peak roughly 165.000. However, the figure for Music Choice in past three days between day 12 and 14 competitively surpass the number of Pop Parade visitors only within a few days.

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Writing Feedback / The ratio of holidaymaker who visit Brighton attractions in England - IELTS Writing Task 1 [2]

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Here the question:

The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton

My answer:

The graph presents the ratio of holidaymaker who visit Brighton attractions in England consists of four different common places: Art Gallery, Pavilion, Pier and Festival between 1980 and 2010, a 30 - year period. Overall, more people went to Pavilion as the most visited among the three remaining places, while the figure of Art Gallery showed reverse.

A further observation between 1980 and 1995 informed tourists who visit Pavilion increased significantly about 50 % in 1995. During the same period, Art Gallery climbed down the percentage after reach a 38 % in 1985 to 22 % in 1995. Similarly, Festival spot also occurred a slight decrease of 25 % in 1995 while the figure of Pier spot fluctuated between 10 % and 15 %.

In next future years by 2010, the percentage of Pavilion started to gradual decline from 50 % in 1995 to 31 % in 2010 as well as Art Gallery dropped the ratio into 8 % in corresponding period. However, the figure for Pier ended significantly toward important improvement of 22 % in 2010 and also there was no significant improvement by the figure of Festival ratio over the period as a whole.

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