Writing Feedback / Students at school and universities learn more from lessons with teacher [3]

Task: Write essay of about 250 words on the following topic: " Students at school and universities learn more from lessons with teachers than from other sources( such as the internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Technology has increasingly developed which provides students at school and universities with more opportunities to learn, however, in my opinion, learning from lessons with teachers is much better than from other sources such as the Internet or television.

There is no denying that we are coming into a great deal of education due to the advance of technology, nevertheless, the Internet and television also have a lot of disadvantages. The sources of information are not official, many are absolutely wrong. television also has a lot of educative programmes but students still need the guidance of the teachers at all stages of learning. Furthermore, students cannot work effectively if they only learn from the Internet or television, because by doing this, they just stare at the screen everyday without practicing in reality

In contrast, learning from lessons with teachers is absolutely beneficial to students. Firstly, they allow students to actively cope with difficult situations in some fields. For example, subjects such as chemistry, physics or biology require a great deal of experience, in this case, teachers can convey all necessary skills to students and are ready to guide them at every step. In addition, teachers are always responsible for checking students's exam or homework, therefore, they can realise their strength or weaknesses and more easily to help them fix it. Last but not least, learning with teachers, students can enhance their ability to co-operate and compete with others because in every lesson, teachers often split them up into groups and encourage them to work together in order to find solutions to some problems.

In conclusion, the uptake of knowledge from teachers is more effective than from any others source of information. However,others source should be considered as a a complement and extension of classical forms of learning if a student wants to fulfill his potential.

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Writing Feedback / If we use cell phones in the right way, they will become the most efficient tool in this modern life [3]

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Task: The use of cell phones has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread use of cell phones?

Using cell phones is no longer a rare sight in this society, almost everyone has a cellphone even if they are not fancying new model. However, many people still suspect whether cellphone brings advantages or disadvantages.

On the one hand, cellphones are useful devices. They have brought everyone in this world into closer touch with one another than ever before. We can get in touch with people everytime, everywhere by means of calling, messaging. Especially in some emergency cases, we are able to contact immediately. Moreover, smartphones have provided us with a lot of softwares that help us to see each other without needing to meet in person. In addition, cellphones are also means of entertainment, they can be used to play games, listen to music, watch movies and so on. After hard-working days, cell phones may be smart choices for anyone who want to refresh or relax.

On the other hand, there are also disadvantages. Using cell phones too much may cause a lot of health problems, your eyes may be badly affected, many parts of the body can not work properly. Furthermore, since you own a connected cellphone, you can hardly ignore the interruptions from facebook, email, twitter,ect and what is even worse, sometimes you miss important works to do. Last but not least, cell phones create a barrier between person and person. Before cell phones were invented, we used to spend a plenty of time with families and friends, we talked freely about everything in life. But now, we spend that precious time staring at the screen, playing games, chatting, ect, instead of meeting face to face, they only send a message or make a phone call, therefore, the relationships in society are becoming worse and worse.

In conclusion, everything has two sides: advantages and disadvantages, cellphones are too. However I believe that if we use cell phones in the right way, they will become the most efficient tool in this modern life.

Writing Feedback / Students who only learn from books and never practice, in reality hardly find any jobs. [4]

Hi everyone, can you help me edit this essay? University function

Task: Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university? Give reasons for your answer, write about 250 words.

In today's world, learning at university is not a strange part in everyone's life. Some people think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. In my opinion, a real university should be a place that provides its students with professional knowledge and the best preparation for their future work. And in those lines, I will express some specific information to support my point of view.

As we all know, learning at university plays an important part in the development of each student. They absorb knowledge of the field that they pursue, not only for their dream but also for a good future. Therefore, the reason that almost students choose to learn at university is to explore new knowledge and to find a job that suits them. For example, students who apply for certain faculties such as medicine, graphics, pedagogy, engineering, ect are hoping to become doctors, designers, teachers, engineers. So as to achieve these works, university has to teach students both specialized knowledge and practical knowledge. They can hold some trips to enterprises, factories, hospitals, ect for students to face up to some difficult problems in their field and to learn more from the experienced people.

As far as I know, being provided with necessary knowledge and skills in the workplace, students will easily apply all the lessons they have learnt at university to their jobs. They are able to handle all urgent situations, never at a loss to start working in a new environment. On the other hand, students who only learn from books and never practice in reality hardly find any jobs. They lack all the necessities to become an efficient employer. And because of this, the unemployment rate among students after graduation are very high.

In conclusion, the uptake of practical knowledge and skills in the workplace is really important to students at university. I believe that a student can fulfill all her potential if she learns in the atmosphere that gives her the top priority to future job.

Writing Feedback / People face far greater risks in our modern way of life than they did in the past [3]

Task: "People face far greater risks in our modern way of life than they did in the past" How far do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, technology is increasingly developed, we are living in a really modern world. This contributes to put forward a question whether people face far greater risks in our modern way of life than we did in the past. I agree with this statement and in those lines, I will give you some specific information to support my opinion.

People are suffering from a great loss which are made by modern things. As we all know, traffic accidents has always been a part of our life, yet the level and severity are larger than ever before. Annually there are hundreds of thousand accidents caused by cars,planes,..not to mention the wounded, great numbers of occupants are died. Additionally, we also witness series of tragic incidents because of leaking nuclear power, leaking electricity,....which still leave enormous consequences at this time. Such things always create a profound fear in everyone's mind.

Furthermore, the use of modern technology from factories, enterprises,... has caused environmental pollution and this indirectly generated climate changes. Therefore natural disasters may happen anytime, anywhere and even on an ultra large scale. Many countries in the world have to restore everything after floods, earthquakes, tsunamis,...many people are homeless, famished, infected,... and worst of all is death. So it is believed that "the more modern this world is, the more dangerous it becomes".

Life is difficult, no matter which periods we live, I believe there are always hazards associated with one each, it is just smaller or bigger. In conclusion, the development of modern life has brought back a greater risk than in the past, however, we can not deny the benefits of modern life in some aspects