Writing Feedback / The proportion of water in six gulf countries in 2000, based on three main objectives [2]

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ps: attachment of the graph is given below.

WRITING TASK 1 (PRACTICE): WATER USE IN GULF COUNTRIES IN 2000

The bar chart compares the proportion of water of six gulf countries in 2000, based on three main objectives: domestic, agriculture, and industrial. At first glance it is evident that agriculture and domestic were the main purposes within all Middle-East nations.

With an exception of Bahrain and Kuwait, all countries spent most of proportion on agriculture. The highest one was in Oman and Saudi Arabia which have a similar number, at approximately four-fifth, while a minority proportion was spent for domestic. Both UAE and Qatar were 20% less than the first two nations on agriculture, besides a half from it was for domestic. On the other hand, Bahrain spent water mostly on domestic business at more than 50%, while a two-fifth was used for agriculture.

Apart from previous comparison, the least water consumption was for industrial which was consumed at less than 10%. The exception was Kuwait where had a similar percentage for both industrial and agriculture, at less than a fifth.

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Writing Feedback / The main feature of the wind turbine are light-weighted-yet-tough blades [2]

Hi! I need your feedback regarding my practice on writing task 1. All critics and suggestions are very welcome!

Q: The diagrams show the design for a wind turbine and its locations.

The image presents specifications and effective locations of a wind turbine to produce electric current. It can be seen that a command centre is required for controlling a wheel sensor, whereas constructing turbine on highland will give a best result on electricity production.

The main feature of wind turbine is light-weighted-yet-tough blades which are supported by wind sensor and generator. All of these components are controlled by computer system in the command house. A steel pole prop the construction to receive power effectively.

The construction can be set everywhere including seashore and high-lying area as long as no disturbance of another landscape features. The higher it is built, the more megawatts will be produced as a consequence of air pressure that spin the blades intensively. The aforementioned system reveals that wind turbine could effectively run 100 kilowatts for domestic purpose, while 1.5 megawatts could be produced by fully constructed turbine for wider range purposes.

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