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Name: ayu sasmita
Joined: Aug 17, 2016
Last Post: Aug 26, 2016
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ayu sasmita08   
Aug 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / Customer satisfaction and specific aspect of flying experience with airlines in the United States [2]

The chart and table highlight the percentage of customer satisfaction quality and specific aspect of flying experience with airlines in the United States in 1999, 2000 and 2007. Overall, satisfied steadily increase, but dissatisfied had declined over period given. Courtesy of flight attendants, courtesy of check in/gate agent and schedules become a majority, which is courtesy of the flight attendants had the highest percentage. Price of tickets and comfort of seats into a minority of enthusiast.

Moving to a more detail analysis, satisfied of job nation's major had increased steadily, approximately 65%, 69% and 72% over period given. The amount of dissatisfied had decreased slowly, roughly 32%, 29% and 24% in three periods.

Following to the table data, courtesy of flight attendants had the highest percentage of satisfaction, there were 88% in 1999, 90% in 2000 and 92% in 2007. Courtesy of check-in/gate agents and schedules had fairly equal percentage from 75 percent to 88 percent. However, comfort of seat had the lowest percentage and only in 2007 roughly 47 percent.




ayu sasmita08   
Aug 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / 'study hard and nourish your body' - healthy food for children at school (writing task 2) [2]

The advent of the new education era, encourage many students to be smart with a good intelligence. There is the main method to make it happen, such as study hard and also nutrition to their body. In my personal perspective, giving kids a healthy food is already required for their growth. I believe that, besides study hard at school or take some courses, meal becomes one of the crucial factors to learn effectively.

With regard to a healthy food, some students should be stimulated with many kinds of meals. There are varieties of food such as plenty of vitamins (fruits and vegetables), protein (eggs, sea foods, and variety of peanut), carbohydrate (rises, corns and breads) and also minerals. All of them can boost up children's antibody and stimulate for their body. The nutrition that kids get from meals have many benefits for their body especially for their brain.

Based on Indonesia recent survey data in 2016, approximately 86 percent kids can pay more attention and had a great mark in school, because they attain an optimum nutrition. In this case, some children took a breakfast before went to the school or their parents made some meals to their kids and bring it to school. It was a very effective way to protect their children from a bad quality food. Time goes by, it is one of the evidence that a good quality of food very affected for children's stimulate of their brain.

To sum up, many factors to make children learn efficiently. However, only two factors which is the main of it. There are study hard and attain optimal nutrition to support children's activities. Some parents should pay more attention to their kids consume. For instance, some parents should give a healthy meal with complex nutrition for their children's growth in order to learn effectively.
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / The percentage of people's trouble when they live abroad in the other countries, based on the age. [4]

hai fadilah !
i have some correction and suggestion for you ...

- The chart presents information about the ... ( that word is so common if you write on your writing task 1, replace with another word that can improve your writing skill)

- ... when they living live abroad in the ... ( pay attention to your verb using )
- ... common people[COMMA] which have... ( PUNCTUATION)
- ... trouble is healthearehealth care and the list is to find out [PLEASE SPELLING]
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / Four Ways to Tell If Your Roommate Is Using Your Computer without Permission [5]

hai hirani..
i have some correction for you...

there some articles miss on your writing :
- This is an article based...
- Talking about the housemates,
- ... can also use a laptop or ...

(pay more attention to your proposition and please concern to set your 'verb'
- ... logged events forof those times,
- ... when they're done doing in a web browser.
- ... and more over (DO NOT SEPARATE IT receive a snap ...
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 26, 2016
Writing Feedback / The Problems of People Who Stay in Foreign Country [4]

hai tiranni..
i have some correction to you, i hope it can improve your writing skill

- The chart presents the percentage ( that word is so common, you should write another word to make your band score higher in IELTS test )
- ... groups have a problem in taking ... ( please pay more attention to the article of words)
- ... highest percentage forof all-three ...
- ... The last problem forof this age ... ( concern to your proposition )
- ... The percentage of maintaining the body ...
- ... is not a problem anymore for this group.
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 25, 2016
Writing Feedback / The money is the main reason to make a business, and the owners goal is to multiple their profits. [2]

the purpose of businesses to make money and should concentrate on it - writing task 2

The advent of new technological encourages society to develop businesses. Some entrepreneur has many reasons to build up their business, one of them is to be wealthy. In my personal perspective, some businessman tends to their mainly purpose to earn much money and have to concentrate on it.

With regard to the business, many think most people create their own business for support peoples' needs, provide what society wants either goods or services. Many kinds of business categories such as education, fashion, food, entertainment, trade, agriculture, investation and others which is competing in each category to gain many customers.

However, from many factors for supporting entrepreneur to make business, it has only one mainly reason, that cause corporation have struggled to evolve their company. Hence the reason is to attain the much more incomes. Most entrepreneurs want to have a great quality of life which is everyone dreaming it and work hard to make it happen. That is one of the strongest reason entrepreneur pay more attention to make a fund.

Another essential thing that, almost businesses have is a strategy. It is a very crucial thing to attract enthusiast or customer. Every entrepreneur has their own strategy which is different with each business category. In this case has the same as purpose to seize every opportunity to obtain many revenue for the company.

To sum up, the majority of entrepreneur decided to build up a business has evident cause for the owner. The main cause to the businessman is to earn much money. So, the company should pay more attention to organize the business to reach their aim.
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / The given linegraph compares personal satisfication rates in four different colleges [3]

hai reyha, i would like to tell you a little about ielts exam, i hope it can improve your skin :)

ielts exam have 4 section such as listening, reading, writing and speaking.
let's talking about writing test ielts, there are two kind of writing ielts (writing task 1 and writing task 2)
well.. i think you wrote about writing task 1.
in writing task 1 :
- the main types (diagram, bar chart, maps, building plans, line graphs, pie charts and tables)
- always recognise your information into following graphs :
1. introduction
2. overview
3. body paragraph 1
4. body paragraph 2
- in writing task 1 you should write roughly 150 words. DO NOT LESS THAN 150 WORDS AND MORE THAN 150 WORDS (but 160 words it can be)

in your writing task 1, i have some suggestion for you :
- there are 209 words and it should be minimised into 150 words.
- you should put overview after introduction, because in writing task 1 there is no conclusion.
- you should pay attention to your punctuation.
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 18, 2016
Scholarship / Media electronics should change their programmes (writing task 2) [2]

In this globalization era, many kinds of media offer either news or entertainment to gain a lot of enthusiasm and to get the highest rate. To make it happen, the reporter pays a great attention to plenty of footballer, actrees and singer. Even though, their reports have not been affected for quality of human life. In my personal persfective, media should give something new for society such as accurate information, a good news or people live which can expend to have spirit of llive.

In 2016 survey data shows that, there are approximately 38 percent of Indonesian people do not taking care of with other people in society. For instance, some teenagers or adults spend much time to watch television that shows about actrees' lifes. So they are affected to their life like what they watch as buy some goods with spectacular prices although their parents much work hard to get money.

Some media should report ordinary people live for society such as charity shows or reality shows which is reporting ordinary people live, taking 'jika aku menjadi' television programme as example, that is one of the charity activities that shows on tv to aim for society how hard they spend their time with work hard to get money. So, from that reality show gives knowegde and symphaty for people to help each other.

To sum up, media as a good places to make people release that helping each other is a good for human life. However, channel of media should offer or persuade some people after watch their programme get many benefit.
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 18, 2016
Scholarship / I have come to agree with John C. Maxwell that leadership is not titled, position but influence [3]

hallo.....
i have some correction for you :)

... that leadership is not titled , position but influence.
... be at the top or bottom(COMMA) but someone that drive innovation and action. I have had to learn thisthese attributes the hardwayhard way .

... during my junior secondary schools days despite being ...
... divergence of opinions always disrupts whatever it is i was ...
... i came across a Chinese adage "Don' t curse the darkness, light a candle". I quiet didn't graspedgrasp the extent of its meaning back then(COMMA) but i knew that it ...

... that influence other students to signed the petition for action.
... to create and maintain an identity database for ...
ayu sasmita08   
Aug 17, 2016
Writing Feedback / Many people have more attention to artificial friends than their neighbor surroudings [2]

The use of electronic media has a negative effect on personal relationship between people. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

In globalization era electronic media jump up significantly. Electronic media release many kind of social networking site which is help people to do everything and communicate with other people around the world easly. However, in my personal perfective, while I believe that such electronic media has a huge beneficial to the person, I agree that they have an enermouse negative effect which is can damaging individual on social communities.

With regard to individuals, the online social media has obvious advantages for each person. Firstly, some people around the world can make a friend and have a good communication by social media online without meet each other before. Previously, it is hard to have a new friends and communicate with anyone outside before development of technology and social networking site. Secondly, people can buy or reserve everything via online media easly such as cloths, book a tickets and food delivery, they use social networking only and then get what they want even stay at home.

On the other hand, electronic media take effect to the individuals on personal relationship between people can only be seen as negative. Some people more likely pay more attention to their online people rather than societies in their local community. Consequently, some people have not a good supportive relationship with other people around their neighborhood and also make some people into lazy person because of everything become instant and easly to get. Furthermore, electronic media make people more interest to spend much their time online and does not matter with their society.

To sum up, social networking in electronic media have brought some benefit to connect people around the world become closer. However, if people spend much time to electronic media it can have not had the same effect on society or local communities as closer in online people. Some people should have more activities and communication in neighborhood in order to promote the future to human quality of life.
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