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Posts by Ifan21
Name: Ifan Aulia Candra
Joined: Sep 13, 2016
Last Post: Oct 12, 2016
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From: Indonesia
School: Andalas University

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Ifan21   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary from Article ​Are Potatoes That Bad for You? ( Elizabeth Narins) [NEW]

The main thing why potato has considerably bad reputation it has high glycemic index such as the pace of potato to be digested in to sugar and dumps through the blood stream. firstly, the food has to be digested and simplified by small molecules called enzyme. secondly, anticipating sugar density in blood body by releasing insulin to sop up all the sugar. it become very easy to be rapidly absorbed if we don't combine it with any other food. in fact of it has high glycemic index though, but keep an open mind that the it's relatively high in carbs. according to research experiment the way to cook potato could significantly influence total carbohydrate contain. Serving potato with large portions can also be a factor why it becomes horribly danger to the body especially for potato lovers. for the conclusion, do not put your mind at ease that it is absolutely damaging your healthiness but broaden your mind about the way for serve potato and concern about how often you consume large portion of potato.
Ifan21   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary of TED HOW DO CARBOHYDRATE IMPACT YOUR HEALT, (Richard .J wood) [2]

Carbohydrate is one of the most vital nutrition, according on Richard explanation, there are literally main classifications of carbohydrate which is depend on the number of simple molecule bond together to form complex carbohydrate. Theoretically, carbohydrate is classified by two categories simple and complex sugar. Firstly, simple sugar it is consisted of one molecule (Glucose, fructose, and sucrose). One molecule bonds together will form "disaccharide" (Lactose, sucrose, maltose). The second classification is complex carbohydrate, it can be formed by three to ten single molecules of sugar, they link together become oligosaccharide, meanwhile "polysaccharide" can be formed by consisting more than ten molecules of sugar. In cell, during digestion process these polysaccharides will split by Enzyme into simple molecules to produce energy. There are principally two kinds of polysaccharide namely Starch and Fiber. Even though they has consisted by same monosaccharide molecules but they are different. Starch which the monosaccharide molecules are bond by α-Bond and Fiber connected by β-bond. They both has typical character. The α-Bond is easy to break, meanwhile fiber are difficult to disparate. The easier to break, the faster glucose is released, instantly sugar density will be high in our blood stream it is called glychemic index. The degree of glucose will be regulated by Insulin hormone which can play main role to coordinate the glucose in our body. It simply has sensitivity regarding on calculation the glucose inside body. In one circumstances insulin can briskly detects the glucose but another case it can very low. In blood stream when the glucose density is very high it can be harmful because it will block the vessel and blood flow that will be triggered "Metabolism syndrome" for instance that stimulate the degenerative disease such as heart attack and stroke.
Ifan21   
Sep 14, 2016
Writing Feedback / Is damaged tropical rainforest caused by Logging industry? [5]

Hello PHA,
It's incredible simple text, these following correction for your writing :
Now days (Nowadays or at present ), logging industry had supplied several impact (impacts ) to environment damage. Some areas felt habitat loss (Lost habitat ), pollution and climate ...

All habitat in forest will be getting bad impact too such us (especially ) algae growth, removing oxygen that finally will be killing fish ...
Responsible logging activity will be guaranty in our nature ...

additionally use variation appropriate grammars
Ifan21   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / 10 Things Not to Say to a Mom Who Puts Her Kids in Day Care (Claire Zulkey) - Summary for article [5]

Parent is what the people are going to be, but some of them would prefer take care their kid to day care provider better than nurturing at home by themselves. One of them who want raise her baby to day care provider instead of nanny is Mrs. Claire. When the 7-month pregnancy she had chosen the woman who has background as a teacher assume that she can encourage the stubble upbringing of the baby and also for educational outlook. There are 10 prohibited things regarding on trusting baby to be cared by day care provider. Primarily, qualified of their proficiency since you lied your capabilities in low level in term of responsibilities to your toddler. Additionally, hiring the nannies is improbable big cost since you are not just to pay them for child but also both for transportation and housekeeping and it is big consideration for those who is called materialism. Horrifying story about boy died at day care can be considered afterward and then fear to lost important part of kid's life. Following by How many children in day care and if you have free time without caring baby it'll be free to earn the money and three others can be simplified by concerning about maternal instinct whether her baby in sufficiently condition or in bad circumstance.

Sources : cosmopolitan.com/lifestyle/a61990/day-care-kids/
Ifan21   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / Summary for TED "A warm embrace that saver live" (Jane Chen) [2]

Twenty millions of babies are suffering premature, intolerant temperature and lack of fat, which make them very tiny as a hand hold. The baby can't constantly regulate temperature to the normal . There are several critical diseases can be suffered namely diabetes, heart problem, low intelligence and even die. Twenty percent from total premature babies had passed away, one of them is Rani the, the daughter of Indian woman Sabita. Currently, the only way to protect premature baby is incubators and are not accessible for rural area such as developmental country. In 2010, Jane and her team had technologically advanced a suitable, sterile, exactly cheap (less than $ 20) than common incubator used for protect premature baby. it seems like simple small sleeping bag. The sleeping bag has sophisticating material like a wax-like substances simply using hot mater and then the melting temperature will be constantly stabled to 37 degree Celsius. The main purpose why they manufactured it was to keep the temperature of baby 37 degree Celsius without electrical obstacles since it doesn't need electric as well. Thus it'll care for baby and in advance the mortality will be rapidly decreased.
Ifan21   
Sep 13, 2016
Writing Feedback / ielts Writing Task 2: Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? [3]

Hello Mayang7g
I am Ifan
The essay you've created about the advantages of traveling is good
These following some of considered corrections to make your essay grammatically correct :
1. Why is this the case ? The appropriate sentence to refer it is simplified by How come this case ?
2. Traveling is become the part of human livelihood ("becomes" it is the linking verb so doesn't need be verb)
3. tremendous increase (In appropriate) because both of word are adjective
4. there is a rapidly (rapid) growth among commuters
5. work commitments (Job commitement )
6. sometimes you repeat the subject so seems like double subject for instance which it is hard for them to spend time
Hoping these corrections would be useful for you

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