nda18
Dec 7, 2016
Writing Feedback / The importance of communication skills in job relation [4]
Hi yika,
when i read your writing, i do not know what kind of writing it is, is it essay? or summary?
however, you bring the word 'table' that means that this is writing task 1 for IELTS.
> Firstly, please attach the image of the table, so we can check the information in your essay.
> Regardless YOUR GRAMMATICAL ERROR, i think your essay is not provide information well.it is because i cannot imagine the table just by reading your essay. you also not mention several information, but explain the increment, making the reader confused.
> it would be better if you arrange your information again.
> here are my suggestion for you
... who are asked in the surveytendTENDED to increase from 1997 to 2006....
...in 1997isWAS dealing with...
...which itisWAS mean that this isWAS almost twice...
... communicationhaveHAD the same trend...
...of skillstendTENDED to increase...
...servicedecreaseDECREASED at 21...
...alsohaveHAD many kinds...
...typestendTENDED to increase...
...to collegeshasHAD ...
(always WATCH YOUR TENSES)
... of external communicationwhich is needed by someone ...
( you do not have MAIN VERB here)
thank you, i hope it will help you
keep writing and break a leg
Hi yika,
when i read your writing, i do not know what kind of writing it is, is it essay? or summary?
however, you bring the word 'table' that means that this is writing task 1 for IELTS.
> Firstly, please attach the image of the table, so we can check the information in your essay.
> Regardless YOUR GRAMMATICAL ERROR, i think your essay is not provide information well.it is because i cannot imagine the table just by reading your essay. you also not mention several information, but explain the increment, making the reader confused.
> it would be better if you arrange your information again.
> here are my suggestion for you
... who are asked in the survey
...in 1997
...which it
... communication
...of skills
...service
...also
...types
...to colleges
(always WATCH YOUR TENSES)
... of external communication
( you do not have MAIN VERB here)
thank you, i hope it will help you
keep writing and break a leg