What is your new home environment there and are you happy with the atmosphere there? Letter to Feby

Jl.gerilya 08 mancar,
Peterongan Jombang
20 October 2016

Assalamualaikum.wr.wb Feby,

Feby Hi, how are you and your family there? I hope there are you and your family's fine. Oh yes, what is your new home environment there and are you happy with the atmosphere there?

It's been a long time it seems we do not meet, since three years ago, precisely when you and your family decide to move. Since we split up, a lot of things going on here. Our village is growing very rapidly, first building next to our house now turned into waves and around the front of the house is now filled with shady trees and look cleaner. In the past, we often play together at home, sometimes at your house at my house sometimes I really miss our time together.

Now the environment around our homes become more lush and beautiful because the government has built better. My home means any means now in renovations for the better, now in front of my house there is a garden and a fish pond.

This may be enough that I can tell you, I really miss coming, I really miss playing together, and I'm also waiting for a reply letter, I'll tell you everything when you come home, bye.

Wassalamuallaikum.wr.wb
Anggi

Hello Anggi :) Let me check your letter :)

Jl.gerilya 08 mancar, ==> Better if you use capital letter every
Peterongan Jombang
20 October 2016

Assalamualaikum.wr.wb Feby,

Feby Hi ,--> Hello Feby, how are you and your family there? I hope there are you and your family's fineyou and your family there are keep well and healthy. Oh yes, what is your new home ...can you tell me about your new home in there? do you happy with the atmosphere in there?

Well, I think there are too much repetition words in your letter such us "Better". "house", "means", "miss" and another words you mention it more than once. My suggestion is you should improves your vocabulary especially add your adjective words, thus you can write more various and attractive in the next time :) keep practices and good luck :)