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The prompt is:
Explain how and why your chosen major ties with your career goal in USA workforce. Discuss any personal experience or circumstances. Include factors such as family heritage,and background. Only 500 words.
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Since I was in elementary school, numbers were fun to work with. It challenged me. Since then I have looked for a career that I would interest me. When I thought of Accounting, the first thing that came to mind was a person that was considered trustworthy and had good standings with all type of people. I could myself as that type of person. An accountant also deals with people who need help with their financial problems. Such as in dealing with money that is received and spent, in other words trying to figure out how to balance the two.
It reminds me of my mother, who as a single mother had to struggle with her finances. I felt a little responsible for the expenses of the house. So I would always try to help her out by calculating the cost of an item when we went shopping. Usually reminding her how much money the item cost and if she really needed it. My mother encouraged me to save my money when she gave me a register as a gift for my tenth birthday.
One of the persons that has influenced in my life was my grandfather. He loved me very much, and taught me a variety of things. He was not only a grandfather to me, I considered him more like a father that I never had. He achieved many things in his lifetime. He was a very successful person, always thinking big. That's a reason why he had twelve children and built the tallest building in Mexico City, at the time he was only twenty-eight years old. He never gave up on anything. Even when he was old and very sick, he would still encourage his grandchildren, especially me. He would feel proud when we accomplishment something, because we were a part of him. He would give each of his granddaughters 10 dollars every Sunday. Unlike my other cousins who would spend it on candy or small toys by the end of the week. I knew that by saving up my money, I could buy something more valuable and eventually I bought myself a piano. Which to this day I consider it a very valuable treasure, because I knew I had made a good decision in buying it.
Since my childhood, my family has shown me a variety of good habits, one of them being common sense. In my opinion, in order to resolve different types of situations that occur in life, one must have ethical standards. Because having ethics is important in all types of field, but especially in accounting because it deals with large sums of money. There are many things that have happened in our society, because people have no ethical code or common sense to the problems that have happened in our world.
Many people have certain personalities that fit the kind of work they do. I consider myself a disciplined person and all the qualities of an accountant suit me well. Such as being a good listening and having ethics in order to help people in the future with their financial problems. Which is what a good accountant does.
The prompt is:
Explain how and why your chosen major ties with your career goal in USA workforce. Discuss any personal experience or circumstances. Include factors such as family heritage,and background. Only 500 words.
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Since I was in elementary school, numbers were fun to work with. It challenged me. Since then I have looked for a career that I would interest me. When I thought of Accounting, the first thing that came to mind was a person that was considered trustworthy and had good standings with all type of people. I could myself as that type of person. An accountant also deals with people who need help with their financial problems. Such as in dealing with money that is received and spent, in other words trying to figure out how to balance the two.
It reminds me of my mother, who as a single mother had to struggle with her finances. I felt a little responsible for the expenses of the house. So I would always try to help her out by calculating the cost of an item when we went shopping. Usually reminding her how much money the item cost and if she really needed it. My mother encouraged me to save my money when she gave me a register as a gift for my tenth birthday.
One of the persons that has influenced in my life was my grandfather. He loved me very much, and taught me a variety of things. He was not only a grandfather to me, I considered him more like a father that I never had. He achieved many things in his lifetime. He was a very successful person, always thinking big. That's a reason why he had twelve children and built the tallest building in Mexico City, at the time he was only twenty-eight years old. He never gave up on anything. Even when he was old and very sick, he would still encourage his grandchildren, especially me. He would feel proud when we accomplishment something, because we were a part of him. He would give each of his granddaughters 10 dollars every Sunday. Unlike my other cousins who would spend it on candy or small toys by the end of the week. I knew that by saving up my money, I could buy something more valuable and eventually I bought myself a piano. Which to this day I consider it a very valuable treasure, because I knew I had made a good decision in buying it.
Since my childhood, my family has shown me a variety of good habits, one of them being common sense. In my opinion, in order to resolve different types of situations that occur in life, one must have ethical standards. Because having ethics is important in all types of field, but especially in accounting because it deals with large sums of money. There are many things that have happened in our society, because people have no ethical code or common sense to the problems that have happened in our world.
Many people have certain personalities that fit the kind of work they do. I consider myself a disciplined person and all the qualities of an accountant suit me well. Such as being a good listening and having ethics in order to help people in the future with their financial problems. Which is what a good accountant does.
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