I choose to study in these three courses of different universities

Studying in UK Question for Chevening

Hi. Please help me revise my essay for Studying in UK Question for Chevening. Your responses are highly appreciated. Thanks :)

I have always been dreaming of improving Indonesian education system. To achieve this dream, I have to empower teachers in Indonesia. Having other perspectives by observing closely to United Kingdom's education system would have been an excellent experience to provide me with novel and constructive ideas. With the help from Chevening scholarship, I believe it is possible to accomplish my dream of Indonesian education.

After completing my master program funded by Chevening scholarship, I plan to start a non-profit organisation, A, to promote teachers' leadership skills and professional development. In this organisation, teachers will help each other to develop professional skills. They will also share information related to education fields, such as governmental regulation about education, ground-breaking teaching methods, or research results they conduct in their own schools. As I understand that every teacher has their own tight schedule, my organisation will provide a website to facilitate this teacher forum. In addition to that, I plan to host free seminars or workshops for teachers.

With my previous educational backgrounds as a Bachelor of English Literature and a Master of English Education and my current employment as an English teacher of a junior high school, I would like to continue my study in a course related to English language and teaching. Therefore, I choose to study in these three courses of different universities: Applied Linguistics for Teaching English to Speakers of Other Languages (B University), English Language and Linguistics (C University), and Linguistics and English Language Teaching (D University).

My main reason to choose to study in Applied Linguistics for TESOL in B University is to complete my Master degree in English Education. In my previous master programme, majorly I learn about theories of English teaching and classroom research. By widening my knowledge in Applied Linguistics, I expect to learn practical or applicable skills in English teaching.

Leaving that aside, my second choice is English Language and Linguistics in C University, which is in line with my bachelor course of English Language and Literature. As in my bachelor degree, I learn English Language and Literature in a general way, I expect to learn English Language and Linguistics in a more specific way in this course. This is because the study of Language and Linguistics has always been appealing to me.

Lastly, my third choice is Linguistics and English Language Teaching in D University. As what I have mentioned before that, personally I am interested in the study of English language and linguistics, and professionally I am an English teacher, I see this course fulfilling both my interest and professional need. In this course, I expect not only to chase a professional development but also to enjoy my university life by learning something I am keen on.

By learning in one of these courses funded by Chevening scholarship, I hope I can fulfil my dream by taking part in developing Indonesian education system.

Hi Theodora! I am also applying for Chevening! Good luck! :)

While I don't know what is exactly expected from us in this essay, here are a few comments of mine:

1. I believe your second paragraph needs to be included into a fourth essay which is Post-study career plan. Although this is not your main career path, you will be doing significant work there, and, hence, it might be better to include in the response to the last question. You could keep one sentence only to mention it but really unfold it in the Post-study career plan.

2. I guess by deleting your second paragraph you will gain more space to elaborate more on your reasons to pursue your chosen courses. It appears to me that your reasons to follow those courses would not be not convincing enough.

3. I would recommend to include specific modules from each course, even collectively, and explain how these relate to your previous experience and future plans.

Hope you find it useful

Theodora, your first 2 paragraphs are not necessary in this instance. Those are explanations that should be included in the university choices as part of the "future application" of the masters course you have chosen to study. It is not supposed to be the main point of the essay. What I noticed in your university choice discussions is that you only went to far as to discuss what you hope to learn. You do not discuss how you hope to use these courses to improve your profession. By improvement, I mean, if you complete this course, what direction does that take your teaching career in? What career path will open up for you by studying each course? That is something that the prompt asks you to explain in relation to your educational background, professional background, and future career plans (simplified version. The long form goes in the Post Study Plan). Paragraph 2 should actually be used as the opening statement for your post study plan which is why I am asking you remove it from this essay.