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In 200 to 300 of your own words, describe personal characteristics and accomplishments that will allow readers to form a complete view of you. Include any family or personal circumstances that may have impact your achievements.
Discovering new places and new people fascinate me. However, that is the reason why I decided to move from Duri, a small town where I used to live for 15 years to move to a big city named Bandung, continuing my senior high school and experiencing on how to live in 'the real world'. Nevertheless, there were some people who underestimate about my decision, but it would not let me down. With the power of an open mind, I easily adapted with the diversity that really inspired me. I remember when my parents told me that I have to be better than them. Every single advice they gave is the guiding lights for me to be a hard worker person and not easily gives up on thing to reach my aim.
I always like to take part in any organizations which support my passions. Organization is the place where I can improve my leadership skill, sharing some ideas, and participating in some competitions. It is a challenge for me in working with the people because every individual has different characteristic and my job is to adjust myself in their characteristic in order to make a great team work and accomplish team's goal.
Always be creative and try to think out of the box, those are my principle. Just like my favorite quotation, "There is always something", means that everything happens for a reason and there is not only one solution to solve it. That's the way I am living my life.
In 200 to 300 of your own words, describe personal characteristics and accomplishments that will allow readers to form a complete view of you. Include any family or personal circumstances that may have impact your achievements.
Discovering new places and new people fascinate me. However, that is the reason why I decided to move from Duri, a small town where I used to live for 15 years to move to a big city named Bandung, continuing my senior high school and experiencing on how to live in 'the real world'. Nevertheless, there were some people who underestimate about my decision, but it would not let me down. With the power of an open mind, I easily adapted with the diversity that really inspired me. I remember when my parents told me that I have to be better than them. Every single advice they gave is the guiding lights for me to be a hard worker person and not easily gives up on thing to reach my aim.
I always like to take part in any organizations which support my passions. Organization is the place where I can improve my leadership skill, sharing some ideas, and participating in some competitions. It is a challenge for me in working with the people because every individual has different characteristic and my job is to adjust myself in their characteristic in order to make a great team work and accomplish team's goal.
Always be creative and try to think out of the box, those are my principle. Just like my favorite quotation, "There is always something", means that everything happens for a reason and there is not only one solution to solve it. That's the way I am living my life.