Three MSc University courses towards an electrical power engineer - studying in the UK question.

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Outline why you have selected your chosen three university courses, explain how this relates to your previous academic or professional experience and your plans for the future

(minimum word count: 100 words, maximum word count: 500 words).

MY CHOSEN THREE MSC COURSES TOWARDS AN ELECTRICAL POWER ENGINEER

The nature of epileptic power supply in my Country, Nigeria has hindered economic growth of the nation. As a graduate of electrical/electronic engineering, I have chosen three MSc courses linked with my academic background and my desire to join hands in providing strategic skills and plans that can solve this problem. I have acquired requisite knowledge and experiences in the field of electrical power engineering during my undergraduate studies. I studied electrical machines, power and machines, energy generation, transmission and distribution among other courses. My internship at an electrical power transmission company in addition to the requisite knowledge I acquired in my studies, I have the background knowledge and experiences that are geared towards the choice of my chosen University courses for a taught master degree in the UK.

My first choice of course is electrical power engineering at the University of Edinburgh. I have the plan to work with the Power industry in Nigeria hence I chose this course at the University of Edinburgh to be abreast of the most recent, cutting edge developments in Power engineering, have skills and training needed in both industrial and academic settings and to be able to tackle the problems of supplying secure, equitable and environmental sustainable energy in Nigeria. These learning outcomes are in line with the courses offered in both semesters which includes power conversion and control, technologies for sustainable energy and distributed energy resources and smart grids.

My second choice of course is energy and sustainability with electrical power engineering at the University of Southampton. Apart from my plan of considering a career in the electrical power industry, I want to become a lecturer in the discipline of Power and machines. This MSc course considers all aspects of sustainable energy generation and gives a solid grounding in the transmission and distribution of electrical power or energy. This would prepare me for a PhD in electrical power engineering and hence avail me the opportunity to become a lecturer.

Electrical Power system engineering at the University of Manchester is my third choice of courses. My desire to work in the electrical power industry and to build a career prompted me to choose this course among my chosen University courses. My aims are to acquire the knowledge and skills needed to make sound decisions in a rapidly changing electricity supply industry, to acquire a sound understanding of the principles and techniques of electrical power engineering. Most importantly, to have a broad knowledge of the issues and problems faced by electrical Power engineering in both industrial and academic settings and the solid working knowledge of the techniques to solve these problems.

Mudiare, you are not supposed to repeat information from your previous presentations. So your opening sentence, which I recall, you used in a different essay before this one, should be removed. That will be taken against you as it is repeated information. Discuss your professional background instead by explaining how the problems you now face at work can only be solved by higher education. Before you present that discussion though, it would be best to present an expanded discussion of your academic studies and how it prepared you for your current occupation first. Your university choice weakness is in the fact that you do not present any future application for the studies in your workplace. The prompt indicates that you have to explain how these course choices can help you with your future career goals. So you have to make mention of that in at least one sentence at the end of the university choice discussion.