I have been working on a scholarship essay and I am finally done but I need some feedbacks. I would really appreciate it if you would criticize it and tell me if I've followed the rules and if It this essay makes sense. thank you and here are the rules of the essay contest
this contest is a chance for you all to demonstrate your understanding of the current state of our earth and how a practical solution can fit into all of it. In the wake of a plethora of environmental disasters in our world's history, and more currently, the BP oil spill, we have never been more hard- pressed to find a way to curb the damage we have already done to our only home. Now, it is your time to become part of the solution. What can we do? That's the question. You must provide the answer.
Alternatives to fossil fuel have been a significant subject of discussion for many years; we have been trying to come up with new ways to produce energy without polluting the environment. The energy production caused more pollution than any other industry in the United States. Nearly all of the energy used in the U.S is generated by fossil fuels; as years went by and carbon dioxide is emitted; there has been a growing concern about the cooperation between fossil fuels and our environment especially after the incident of the BP oil spill. I believe the best solution to our problems would be to implement wind energy as an alternative to fossil fuel.
Wind energy has been around for many years and it is surprising how we have not yet realized that it can, and will play a huge important role in having a cleaner environment. According to the U.S department of energy, wind energy propelled boats along the Nile River as early as 5000 B.C. By 200 B.C, simple windmills were pumping water in China and were grinding grain in Persia and the Middle East. It seems that societies have taken advantage of wind energy for thousands of years but have not really put it to good use. Wind power is one of the most promising new energy sources that can be used as an alternative to fossil fuel. The United States has enough wind resources to generate electricity for every home in the nation. The American wind energy association states that, in 1999 global wind energy capacity topped 10,000 megawatts, which is approximately 16 billion kilowatt-hours of electricity. Apparently it's enough to serve over 5 cities that are the size of Miami. Some may not think that it is significant but I believe that if we take the right steps in the near future, wind power could become one of our main sources of energy.
Although fossil fuel has been our way of obtaining energy, it's blanketing our environment with pollution, we thought that fossil fuels would be around forever but that's not the case anymore. It's obvious that we have been suffering from this source of energy; even when we know that there is a better one out there. Wind energy has a set of qualities that no other form of energy can compete with, not even fossil fuels. It's safe, clean, domestic, and we have an abundant amount of it. As energy prices continue to rise worldwide, the U.S is becoming more interested in renewable forms of energy and what better way to solve the problem than harnessing wind as a source of energy. Not only is it free fuel; it's not really going to cost us anything except for maintaining it. And compared to natural gas prices, it seems very appealing.
In addition wind energy has lower carbon emissions, something that fossil fuel doesn't have. The U.S department of energy states that fossil fuel provide more than 80% of all energy consumed in the U.S. if that is the case, we need to end the use of fossil fuels. If we want to strive for a better environment, we have to belittle our independence on fossil fuels. We can better the health of all living things, and I believe wind energy can do just that. It's very critical to our health because no matter what we are doing during the day or night, we are consuming oxygen and carbon dioxide. We breathe in polluted air which is harmful to our health and environment. So why continue to put ourselves in danger when we know that something could be done about it.
Wind energy is used in many countries. Germany, Europe, Spain, Denmark are among the world's leading nations in the takeover of wind energy. The United States could be among those leading countries if they were to work harder. They are getting closer but there is always room for improvement. In fact according to NASA, in 2001, the U.S rejected the Kyoto protocol, an agreement about decreasing the emissions of greenhouse gases because George W Bush said that the agreement could harm the U.S economy. Instead he declared that the United States would work with other countries to limit global warming. Other countries, mostly European decided to continue with the agreement without the U.S participation. I guess George W Bush was not aware that this decision would become a threat to our planet, society, and health. Now we can't afford to waste any more time especially at the moment when our energy challenge is so great, and our inactions are very perilous.
These other countries are using wind power to get some of their electricity. It seems to me that they are overtaking the United States. Although the United States' wind power has grown every year, we haven't really taken the action to manufacture the wind turbines. Maybe if it wasn't the lack of leadership in government, we could have progressed. Now things are ameliorating; the U.S wind turbines efficiency is becoming great. States like Texas, Kansas and a few others are using wind turbines to generate electricity. Texas has the world's largest wind farm, the Roscoe wind farm. It consists of 627 wind turbines and a capacity of 781.5 megawatt. If we can be able to set up wind turbines in various places in the U.S, it would not only tremendously help and free the country from the use of fossil fuel; but it can also help with the economy. Million of new wind related jobs could be created which would help especially the way the economy is.
The U.S has a long way to go before it can reach its goal of bringing forth a renewable source of energy. But if the U.S continues to shift toward domestic manufacturing like wind power, it would become our main source of energy that can help us start living a healthy life in a clean environment.
this contest is a chance for you all to demonstrate your understanding of the current state of our earth and how a practical solution can fit into all of it. In the wake of a plethora of environmental disasters in our world's history, and more currently, the BP oil spill, we have never been more hard- pressed to find a way to curb the damage we have already done to our only home. Now, it is your time to become part of the solution. What can we do? That's the question. You must provide the answer.
Alternatives to fossil fuel have been a significant subject of discussion for many years; we have been trying to come up with new ways to produce energy without polluting the environment. The energy production caused more pollution than any other industry in the United States. Nearly all of the energy used in the U.S is generated by fossil fuels; as years went by and carbon dioxide is emitted; there has been a growing concern about the cooperation between fossil fuels and our environment especially after the incident of the BP oil spill. I believe the best solution to our problems would be to implement wind energy as an alternative to fossil fuel.
Wind energy has been around for many years and it is surprising how we have not yet realized that it can, and will play a huge important role in having a cleaner environment. According to the U.S department of energy, wind energy propelled boats along the Nile River as early as 5000 B.C. By 200 B.C, simple windmills were pumping water in China and were grinding grain in Persia and the Middle East. It seems that societies have taken advantage of wind energy for thousands of years but have not really put it to good use. Wind power is one of the most promising new energy sources that can be used as an alternative to fossil fuel. The United States has enough wind resources to generate electricity for every home in the nation. The American wind energy association states that, in 1999 global wind energy capacity topped 10,000 megawatts, which is approximately 16 billion kilowatt-hours of electricity. Apparently it's enough to serve over 5 cities that are the size of Miami. Some may not think that it is significant but I believe that if we take the right steps in the near future, wind power could become one of our main sources of energy.
Although fossil fuel has been our way of obtaining energy, it's blanketing our environment with pollution, we thought that fossil fuels would be around forever but that's not the case anymore. It's obvious that we have been suffering from this source of energy; even when we know that there is a better one out there. Wind energy has a set of qualities that no other form of energy can compete with, not even fossil fuels. It's safe, clean, domestic, and we have an abundant amount of it. As energy prices continue to rise worldwide, the U.S is becoming more interested in renewable forms of energy and what better way to solve the problem than harnessing wind as a source of energy. Not only is it free fuel; it's not really going to cost us anything except for maintaining it. And compared to natural gas prices, it seems very appealing.
In addition wind energy has lower carbon emissions, something that fossil fuel doesn't have. The U.S department of energy states that fossil fuel provide more than 80% of all energy consumed in the U.S. if that is the case, we need to end the use of fossil fuels. If we want to strive for a better environment, we have to belittle our independence on fossil fuels. We can better the health of all living things, and I believe wind energy can do just that. It's very critical to our health because no matter what we are doing during the day or night, we are consuming oxygen and carbon dioxide. We breathe in polluted air which is harmful to our health and environment. So why continue to put ourselves in danger when we know that something could be done about it.
Wind energy is used in many countries. Germany, Europe, Spain, Denmark are among the world's leading nations in the takeover of wind energy. The United States could be among those leading countries if they were to work harder. They are getting closer but there is always room for improvement. In fact according to NASA, in 2001, the U.S rejected the Kyoto protocol, an agreement about decreasing the emissions of greenhouse gases because George W Bush said that the agreement could harm the U.S economy. Instead he declared that the United States would work with other countries to limit global warming. Other countries, mostly European decided to continue with the agreement without the U.S participation. I guess George W Bush was not aware that this decision would become a threat to our planet, society, and health. Now we can't afford to waste any more time especially at the moment when our energy challenge is so great, and our inactions are very perilous.
These other countries are using wind power to get some of their electricity. It seems to me that they are overtaking the United States. Although the United States' wind power has grown every year, we haven't really taken the action to manufacture the wind turbines. Maybe if it wasn't the lack of leadership in government, we could have progressed. Now things are ameliorating; the U.S wind turbines efficiency is becoming great. States like Texas, Kansas and a few others are using wind turbines to generate electricity. Texas has the world's largest wind farm, the Roscoe wind farm. It consists of 627 wind turbines and a capacity of 781.5 megawatt. If we can be able to set up wind turbines in various places in the U.S, it would not only tremendously help and free the country from the use of fossil fuel; but it can also help with the economy. Million of new wind related jobs could be created which would help especially the way the economy is.
The U.S has a long way to go before it can reach its goal of bringing forth a renewable source of energy. But if the U.S continues to shift toward domestic manufacturing like wind power, it would become our main source of energy that can help us start living a healthy life in a clean environment.
