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I want to attend Yale because of its academic opportunities and also the Yale Symphony Orchestra.YSO enables me to continue music while I pursue other academic interests.One of my friends from highschool performs in YSO.He and I are similar cases.He told me that he chose Yale rather than a conservatory because Yale's 2-in-1 aspect was simply the best fit for students like him.I agree. No other school that I have researched gives me the opportunities in both academics and music that Yale does.
I want to attend Yale because of its academic opportunities and also the Yale Symphony Orchestra.YSO enables me to continue music while I pursue other academic interests.One of my friends from highschool performs in YSO.He and I are similar cases.He told me that he chose Yale rather than a conservatory because Yale's 2-in-1 aspect was simply the best fit for students like him.I agree. No other school that I have researched gives me the opportunities in both academics and music that Yale does.