Academic opportunities;Yale Symphony Orchestra; Why Yale?

Note- characters pretty much maxed out, rough draft

I want to attend Yale because of its academic opportunities and also the Yale Symphony Orchestra.YSO enables me to continue music while I pursue other academic interests.One of my friends from highschool performs in YSO.He and I are similar cases.He told me that he chose Yale rather than a conservatory because Yale's 2-in-1 aspect was simply the best fit for students like him.I agree. No other school that I have researched gives me the opportunities in both academics and music that Yale does.

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I want to attend Yale because of it's academic opportunities and the Yale Symphony Orchestra.

You wrote:

"One of my friends from highschool performs in YSO.He and I are similar cases.He told me that he chose Yale rather than a conservatory because Yale's 2-in-1 aspect was simply the best fit for students like him."

I changed it to:
One of my friends from high school performs in YSO, and he told me Yale's 2-in-1 academic option was a better fit for him than a conservatory.

The original has 209 characters, while the one I just posted only have 146. Hope I helped!

not bad essay ... but try to show ur passion.... u talked about ur friend more than u talk about ur self.... try write a better one

Try to mention specific professors or performances to show you have done the research and keep the focus off of you're friend when you have such limited character space.