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'Since my birthday is...' The best day of my life - COMMON APP



sunshinere 1 / -  
Oct 22, 2013   #1
Prompt: The best day of my life (so far) was... Please tell a story that allows us to experience your best day

Since my birthday is in the middle of the summer what I usually do for my present is take a friend to an amusement park. My thirteenth birthday, however, was different. I would be getting a dog for my present. All the years of persistent begging to get a dog finally paid off. Walking into the backroom of the animal shelter, I was overwhelmed with the sight of about 40 dogs that were all in need of a loving home. One dog, though, caught my eye from the very beginning. She was a 4-year old black lab mix. The moment I looked at her I knew I would be taking that dog home. Upon arriving home, with my newly named dog, Gypsy, I realized taking care of a dog would be more work than I expected. It was my responsibility to walk her, feed her, clean up after her etc., but I did find the work extremely rewarding. Having my own dog taught me the aspects of responsibility, not only for myself, but for another living creature. While I was looking around at colleges I was very pleased to find that Virginia Tech has a major in veterinary science because I have the dream of one day becoming a vet. The best day of my life, so far, is my thirteenth birthday, the day I got a dog, the day I fell in loves with animals, and the day realized what I want to do with my life.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Oct 23, 2013   #2
Since my birthday is in the middle of the summer what I usually do for my present is take a friend to an amusement park.

.... Well.... this is confusing :( Have you got this as your birthday present or is this your birthday treat to your friend ? I am not clear about this.

My thirteenth birthday, however, was different.

However, it was different for my thirteenth birthday.

It was my responsibility to walk her, feed her, clean up after her etc

It was my responsibility to make her walk, feed her, clean her up etc.


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