Hi everyone! It'd be fantastic if you could help me revise this essay. It's the standard "Why Notre Dame" essay and is supposed to be a max of 1500 characters so I don't have much room to experiment. I feel as though my essay isn't personal or creative, but yet again I know these are the kind of essays where they want to see what you'd contribute/do in the college's community.
It's the blue and gold that's splattered on the cheering faces of Notre Dame students as they wear "The Shirt" to the football games. It's the extensive alumni network and the trees the sweep the edges of the breathtaking grotto. It's reasons like these that further intensify my desire to attend Notre Dame.
As an aspiring doctor and prospective biology major, those aren't the only reasons why I want to attend Notre Dame. At Notre Dame, I know I can pursue my ambitions. It's constantly progressing as a school and making the necessary adjustments in order to revolutionize the way its students will administer their research in the modern age. It has facilities, such as Jordan Hall, where I'd be able to conduct my studies in a setting that mirrors the setting of an experienced researcher's laboratory. It's one of the only places where I could use a FTIR to determine molecular bonds in a compound and then have the privilege to head over to Nieuwland Hall to use the NMR Spectrometers to study the same compound at an atomic level. Notre Dame offers endless possibilities, possibilities that will help me thrive as a student and possibilities that can't be found anywhere else.
It's the blue and gold that's splattered on the cheering faces of Notre Dame students as they wear "The Shirt" to the football games. It's the extensive alumni network and the trees the sweep the edges of the breathtaking grotto. It's reasons like these that further intensify my desire to attend Notre Dame.
As an aspiring doctor and prospective biology major, those aren't the only reasons why I want to attend Notre Dame. At Notre Dame, I know I can pursue my ambitions. It's constantly progressing as a school and making the necessary adjustments in order to revolutionize the way its students will administer their research in the modern age. It has facilities, such as Jordan Hall, where I'd be able to conduct my studies in a setting that mirrors the setting of an experienced researcher's laboratory. It's one of the only places where I could use a FTIR to determine molecular bonds in a compound and then have the privilege to head over to Nieuwland Hall to use the NMR Spectrometers to study the same compound at an atomic level. Notre Dame offers endless possibilities, possibilities that will help me thrive as a student and possibilities that can't be found anywhere else.