Unanswered [2] | Urgent [0]
  

Home / Undergraduate   % width   Posts: 4


CU - Boulder Essay about diversity and winter survival (500 words)



mccarthc 2 / 3  
Jan 4, 2010   #1
It had been drizzling all day, but the sky finally opened up and started to pour. The past six hours were spent hiking through knee-deep snow, navigating Maine's Mahoosic Mountain Range with a map and compass, trying to find a place to set up camp. We finally found a suitable location as the sun dipped behind the mountains and by now, everyone was cold, wet, and exhausted. We still had to set up shelters, unpack all the food and supplies, gather firewood, and eventually build a fire pit, complete with a circular bench to fit all ten students plus the two teachers who were guiding us. Welcome to day five of Gould Academy's eight-day winter survival trip.

Despite the miserable conditions, it took less than an hour to get all the shelters set up and a pot on the fire for dinner. Tonight we were having the highly anticipated, macaroni and cheese with bacon. A much-needed change from the boring meals of lentils and rice, or dried fruits and trail mix we had been eating before. "Anyone here a vegetarian?" asked Mr. Siekman as he raised the frying pan of bacon to add it into to pot. "Wait!" shouted Areeb, but it was too late, he had already dumped the pan into the pot. "Oh sorry Areeb, you should have spoken sooner, you can just pick around the bacon, right?" "No you don't understand!" exclaimed Areeb, "I am not a vegetarian, I can't eat pork because of my religion." He further went on to explain how the Koran considers pigs to be unclean animals and says that they should not be eaten under any circumstance. "What if it's Kosher?" I asked, which sparked a conversation religion that lasted throughout dinner.

We sat out in the rain for two hours after dinner, discussing everything from the existence of God to the moneymaking schemes of the Catholic Church. In our group of ten people, we had students representing China, Korea, Taiwan, Germany, Pakistan, and The United States. The multiple perspectives really opened my eyes to the vast complexities of each religion and inspired me to take a course on eastern philosophy this fall. This one conversation turned what was looking to be an awful day, into the highlight of my trip.

This experience showed me that you do not have to have some amazing unique quality to enrich a diverse community. In fact, everyone is unique in some way; no two people are the same. To me, one of the most appealing aspects of the whole college experience is getting a chance to meet thousands of new people who all have their own ideas and perspectives, and being able to share all of my ideas with them. I strive to enter every conversation with a positive attitude and an open mind andhope to deepen my understanding of the world around me through both my academic studies and in my everyday interactions with other people.

Jeannie 10 / 211  
Jan 4, 2010   #2
... have to have some amazingly unique quality to ...

... positive attitude and an open mind, andI hope to deepen my understanding ...

Looks practically perfect to me. I read the whole thing through and completely forgot I was reading to edit until that last tiny bit. My eyes never skipped once!

I wanna go next time!:O
jinglebells 3 / 15  
Jan 4, 2010   #3
... but the sky finally opened up maybe i'm just not familiar with this expression but when I imagine the sky opening up, I think of the clouds dispersing and it started to pour.

wow. this essay was fricking amazing. it was a story. and not one part of it bored me. great job!
Jeannie 10 / 211  
Jan 5, 2010   #4
It had been drizzling all day, but the sky finally opened up maybe i'm just not familiar with this expression ...

I thought the same thing and then I remembered that the sun sets regardless of cloud cover, and it gets even freaking colder! Perhaps KC has a point if two readers caught that. Maybe a tiny revision there is in order??

's up to you...

Blue skies!

Jeannie


Home / Undergraduate / CU - Boulder Essay about diversity and winter survival (500 words)
Need Writing or Editing Help?
Fill out one of these forms:

Graduate Writing / Editing:
GraduateWriter form ◳

Best Essay Service:
CustomPapers form ◳

Excellence in Editing:
Rose Editing ◳

AI-Paper Rewriting:
Robot Rewrite ◳

Academic AI Writer:
Custom AI Writer ◳