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Why Brown Essay (no personal connections with Brown)


timeturner36 8 / 26  
Dec 20, 2009   #1
I am afraid this might be too generic, but I am reluctant to actually research particular professors and classes since I feel like that would almost be lying. It is really not because I'm lazy but because its not the professors and classes that appeal to me but the spirit of free curriculum. But anyway, it would be really great if someone can give this a read and let me know if it's ok. Thanks so much! :)

Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? (1000 characters)

I have no personal connections with Brown. Neither of my parents went to school in the U.S., and I have no siblings. My search for college solely depended on the information I could gather and what I saw when I visited. Certainly, Brown qualifies as what everyone calls a "prestigious institute". Without a doubt, Brown hosts a student body of the most talented, the most driven, and the most genuine. But what I saw at Brown constitute not only of all those things but the ambiance of freedom and responsibility, a seemingly paradoxical education system that allows maturation and growth with little boundaries. The balance between independence and guidance would allow me to thrive and create my own niche, while keeping me on track so that I will be ready for the approaching future. Brown is an intellectual community that would not only allow me to interact with students who share the raw and sincere passion I have for learning but also give me the liberal arts education tailored to my dreams
Katsch 4 / 63  
Dec 20, 2009   #2
I think you can almost entirely get rid of the first five sentences. You don't need to tell us that you aren't personally connected to Brown or that it's a prestigious institute. Don't try to make excuses for what doesn't draw you there, just focus on what does attract you to the school.

Your answer to "Why Brown?" is essentially "The balance between independence and guidance." The spirit of free curriculum, as you said very nicely. Maybe expand a little on why that fits your style of learning? Perhaps you've done a project under loose restrictions that's worked really well?

You don't have to research specific professors, but it might be nice to be more specific about Brown's programs. Make this essay unique. If you want this to help boost your chances of getting in, you're going to have to stand out among the other applicants answering this same question.
lowcal 12 / 27  
Dec 20, 2009   #3
This supplement is strong without a doubt, but like the above, you don't need to praise Brown as "prestigious", they already know that. When it's asking "Why Brown", they want more you not more them. Why do YOU want to, ask youself, who what where when how and why questions about Brown and how it will benefit your life. I hope i helped and good luck!
OP timeturner36 8 / 26  
Dec 20, 2009   #4
Revision! Yay!

Is this slightly better?

Certainly, Brown qualifies as what everyone calls a "prestigious institute" and without a doubt it hosts a student body of the most talented, the most driven, and the most genuine. But what I saw at Brown during my visit constitute not only f academic excellence but the ambiance of freedom and responsibility, a seemingly paradoxical education system that allows maturation and growth with little boundaries. I have always been an adventurous learner who chooses her own paths within the limit of exploration. The balance between independence and guidance would allow me to thrive and create my own niche, while keeping me on track so that I will be ready for the approaching future. Brown is an intellectual community that would not only allow me to interact with students who share the raw and sincere passion I have for learning but also give me the liberal arts education tailored to my aspirations. Meanwhile, I hope to become an addition to this community with everything I can offer.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Dec 22, 2009   #5
Certainly, Brown qualifies as what everyone calls a "prestigious institute" and without a doubt it hosts a student body of the most talented, the most driven, and the most genuine. But What I saw at Brown during my visit constitute consisted not only of academic excellence but also of an ambiance of freedom and responsibility, a seemingly paradoxical education system that allows maturation and growth with little boundaries.

Brown is an intellectual community that would not only allow me---> oh, no, not another "not only but also" sentence! Only use one of those in this brief essay...

Of course it is an intellectual community. Of course you hope to become an addition to this community with everything you can offer. Don't say things that are obvious!

:-)

It will be better if you tell them something unique about your personal philosophy and approach you your chosen field.
OP timeturner36 8 / 26  
Dec 27, 2009   #6
Revisions:

Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply? (1000 characters)

What I saw at Brown during my visit constitutes not only academic excellence but also the ambiance of freedom and responsibility, a seemingly paradoxical education system that allows maturation and growth with little boundaries. I have always been an adventurous learner who chooses her own paths within the limit of exploration. The balance between independence and guidance would allow me to thrive and create my own niche, while keeping me on track so that I will be ready for the approaching future. From my conversations with current Brown students, I have really come to appreciate that Brown students learn for the sake of learning. Brown is an intellectual community that would not only allow me to interact with students who share the sincere passion I have for learning but also to balance my pursuit of medicine with a broad liberal arts background. I believe that with my initiative, maturity, and self-confidence, I can make every day of the next four years count at Brown University.

Why are you drawn to the academic fields you indicated in the Anticipated Degree and Academic Interest questions above? (1000 characters)

Today, the world population is estimated at 6,800,000,000, and I make up only one individual out of such an immense and growing denominator. Because one human life can seem so infinitesimal, I have set for myself the goal to find the proof of my existence. When I realized my passion for Biology, I also realized that medicine would not only allow me to pursue my passion but also to find such proof, for every decision a doctor makes can make an impact on another's life. I wish to be the one to fight chances and deliver hope by using what I know. Another field that also appeals to my interest is environmental science. Being someone who holds a spiritual enthusiasm for nature, I see it as my personal mission to combat anything that might threaten its fragile beauty. In addition, environmental problems often result in other negative consequences. To be more educated in environmental science, I would be able to improve human health by reducing air pollution and water contamination.


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