Any advice would be great! Thank you!
Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated earlier in this application?
I was born into a very diverse household. I have a German French mother who was raised in Spain and a Dominican father who was raised in NYC. Fortunately, I had the chance to travel and visit different countries including France, Spain, Greece, Peru, Argentina, Uruguay, Haiti, Dominican Republic, and Morocco. Through these trips, I realized my passion to immerse myself within different areas of the world. International relations doesn't just involve policy though, it involves, culture, economy, philosophy, history, geography, and psychology. I get to study all these subjects and see how it all comes into one. We have hundreds of global issues, yet the effect always varies. I enjoy seeing different perspectives and compromising for it to benefit both sides. I want to be the mediator. My goal is to solve the complex social and international phenomena, whether it have to do with global warming, poverty, or religion.
I want to graduate from college with a dynamic education. I want to study philosophy and politics, yet I would love to discover the laws of physics that run our universe and what neurology says about our brain. I believe through Brown's faculty and innovative students Brown will fulfill that. It will deepen my ability to source connections over varied content, and revolutionize my intellectual journey. I thoroughly believe that Brown's strong culture of individual curriculum and lifelong-education, in coalition with my academic approach and character is the quintessential choice, strengthening the college's diversity of freethinking students.
Tell us where you have lived - and for how long - since you were born; whether you've always lived in the same place, or perhaps in a variety of places. (100 word limit)
I was born in New York City, but I moved when I was three. Since 2001 I have lived in Miami in six different homes. Miami has proven itself to be a progressive diverse city, and that is how I see myself. I am constantly growing new buildings of knowledge and growth as I tear down the old shattered ones. My home has given me a chance to live within a Latino and European community, but it has also shown me that I want to go beyond the Sunshine State and experience a seasonal change within.
We all exist within communities or groups of various sizes, origins, and purposes; pick one and tell us why it is important to you, and how it has shaped you. (100 word limit)
We call ourselves the Machukas. We consist of 10 wild teenage kids who met in Haiti and are trying to find how we fit in this Earth. Machuka means lonely and single in Creole. Ironic enough, we are anything but lonely. They have taught me to disconnect myself from stressful worries and free my mind to focus on living in the present. Through our wild adventures in a paddleboard, they have taught me to question concepts such as whether homosexuality is innate or a choice. Through each of our unique personalities, we provide a balance, which I find exquisite. The Machukas have shown me the door to improvement and to constantly push myself no matter how big the obstacle is.
For the first response, the only suggestion I have is to add the last sentence "I want to become a mediator.." towards the beginning. So in that way, the rest of your backstory can further strengthen and explain why you wanted to do what you plan on doing.
The second response was really good. There's not much change that's needed, in my opinion. The only thing I can suggest (but really isn't necessary) is to point out a specific and unique program that Brown has that no other school has. A majority of schools have a dynamic learning environment from specialty schools to liberal arts colleges, but what does Brown have that makes it so special and beneficial to you specifically?
For the third response, add a comma after "Since 2001," Also, the "seasonal change within" part seems kind of awkward in a way. Perhaps you can continue with the whole theme of diversity.(ie: "and further delve into a diverse environment at Brown.")
As for the last one, it's an interesting group and explanation, but I was still left a bit confused due to the insufficient amount of background information. How did you come across this group? I think learning about how you immersed yourself within that group is just as interesting as the rest of the story.
Overall, the supplements were well-written and seemed to have a lot of thought put into them. Good luck!