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cicijolee 5 / 19  
Dec 30, 2013   #1
I feel that my Brown supplements are pretty weak so I'm looking for any feedback about how I can improve them. Thanks :)

Why are you drawn to the area(s) of study you indicated in our Member Section, earlier in this application? If you are "undecided" or not sure which Brown concentrations match your interests, consider describing more generally the academic topics or modes of thought that engage you currently.

Ever since I attended a biomedical research program two summers ago, I've been crazy about molecular biology and genetics. There is just something about molecular biology that is intriguing, possibly the fact that everything I learn about it is happening in my body at that exact moment, and the intricate nature of the genetic code is fascinating. Ever since then, I've gone on to explore different ways I could apply my love for biology and the biomedical sciences. I reached out to a neurologist, Dr. Mathur, who works at the Virtua hospitals and he agreed to let me shadow him for a few days. Like the research program, this experience was just as interesting and eye-opening. I loved the way Dr. Mathur performed neurological exams and communicated with the patients. I realized becoming a doctor, maybe even a neurologist, is something I want to do in the future.

We all exist within communities or groups of various sizes, origins, and purposes; pick one and tell us why it is important to you, and how it has shaped you.

There is a music community that you belong to the moment you pick up your instrument and start participating in orchestras. The people in this community, my fellow musicians, can relate to my frustrations of having to practice instead of watching a movie with my friends and they can understand that Saturday mornings aren't for sleeping in but for rehearsals. Not many of my classmates in my school are as involved in music as I am, so having that extra community of people who understand why I do what I do and even do similar things really encourages me to continue to make sacrifices in order to do what I love.

I am the person I am today because of this music community's support: cooperative, independent, confident, dedicated, and passionate. Without them, I would not have developed the love that I have for music today.

Why Brown?

I've never been someone who has only loved one subject. Finding connections between what I'm learning in different classes, such as mentions of "Pyrrhic victories" (something I've learned in Latin class) during English class, has always been interesting and exciting to me. That is why I value distribution requirements or a "Core" of classes that all undergraduate students have to take. I want a broad basis of knowledge from different subjects instead of just one academic area in order to really make me knowledgeable, not only about my academic interests, but also about the world.

Brown does even more than just provide me with a liberal arts education; it lets me take control of what I learn and even choose exactly what classes and subjects I want to take in order to become the person I want to become.

I've always been an independent person, so to be able to have freedom like this is priceless to me. I seriously can't wait to learn collectively from my history, language, English, and social and natural science classes if accepted to Brown.

adatiger96 4 / 7  
Dec 30, 2013   #2
I tried to do something a little bit different that what you have going already. I was sure where to go from here but, maybe this could inspire you to take a different approach to this essay?

Good luck!

Every time I pickup an instrument, I'm simultaneously inducted into a community of music enthusiast. Within this community, talking doesn't exist. Musicians have their own language. My fellow musicians and I share our stories of missed opportunities (homecoming, hangouts with friends and social events) through the harmonization of our collective instruments. Yet, within this community, complaining doesn't exist. The unconscious taping of our synchronized feet to the music demonstrates our dedication to Saturday morning rehearsal. Not many of my classmates understand the language we speak.

. in my school are as involved in music as I am, so having that extra community of people who understand why I do what I do and even do similar things really encourages me to continue to make sacrifices in order to do what I love.

I am the person I am today because of this music community's support: cooperative, independent, confident, dedicated, and passionate. Without them, I would not have developed the love that I have for music today.
badra100 - / 9  
Dec 30, 2013   #3
Brown 3 essays are very easy to write. You can find these essays from every book.
adatiger96 4 / 7  
Dec 30, 2013   #4
*Musicians have their unspoken language

Maybe using appreciate instead dedication, might be better

End with "this language has taught me ...."
OP cicijolee 5 / 19  
Dec 30, 2013   #5
adatiger96
love the way you used language as a metaphor! I'll definitely try it, thanks!


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