CommonApp Short Answer: "Best tutor in the world"

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

As I check her math answers, Cristina hands me a sheet of paper. Curious, I look and read the words "Best tutor in the world" above a picture of Cristina. As I read those words, a huge smile forms from my lips.

Parents of children with ADHD often provide their children additional instructional aid, which was how Cristina and I met. At first, I was unsure which teaching methods to use, but learning of our mutual passion for art, I began to use visual and hands-on learning techniques like multiplication with teddy bears in bags and subtraction by eating real candies. I also applied positive reinforcements of praises and prizes that encouraged her to enjoy learning. Through our long two year tutoring relationship as mentor and student, Cristina became more focused in her studies.

This is my most fulfilling experience and lesson: to teach a disabled child that she is not disabled, that she can achieve anything she desires to do, by teaching her through sundry methods I've learned.

Hey angelserenite!

I think it's a great essay. The introduction was really interesting.

But I think what will make this essay better would be if you included like maybe some emotions or thoughts about your tutoring. One of the major questions I think you should answer is Why do you like tutoring the disabled or What you got out of tutoring the disabled?

Hope I helped =)

I think that this is great! I would add some more emotions to it to make it more personal. It seems like you're a bit close on the character limit so maybe eliminating some filler words would help achieve this.

to teach a disabled child that she is not disabled, that she can achieve anything she desires to do, by teaching her through sundry methods I've learned.

..teaching a disabled child, through sundry methods, that she can achieve anything desires and sets her mind to.

Also, I agree with what Ace said, try incorporating your own emotions into it, and how you learnt from the experience.

Other than that, your essay is very nice, and makes you come off as a humble and genuine person.