"Computers have always interested me" - MIT Prompt: We know you lead a busy life...

PROMPT: We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it

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Computers have interested me since I was a child. From my introduction at age 3, it's been love at first sight. I was first acquainted with the power button, the magic that brought the flashing lights and not-so-quiet whir of the fan to life. Since then, I've needed no encouragement to explore these wonderful, and useful, pieces of machinery. When I'm not tinkering around, messing with the seemingly endless possibilities, I might just be learning another (programming) language or designing yet another website.

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It's just a rough start, but I tried to make it sound more conversational given the 100 word limit
Any thoughts, would that be a bad idea? Any suggestions would be appreciated :)

For a rough start, you get your point across generally well. Here are some suggestions to consider.

There were a few excess coma's and awkward wording but good nonetheless. I know 100 words leaves you very little room for changes but consider what else about the computer sparks your interest.

Hi, i like you're essay, it shows your passion for computers. However, you need a better start, cuz ur current one is a little bit boring. Can you take a look at my essays ?! .. i am applying to MIT too