Defining of happiness - GW Supplement: "experiences outside the classroom correlates with success"

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Prompt: Research shows that an ability to learn from experiences outside the classroom correlates with success in college. What was your greatest learning experience over the past 4 years that took place outside of the traditional classroom? (249/250 Words)

Nearly two years ago I sat in a room with fifteen other teenagers at a youth conference. We went around the room and shared what we wanted to do with our lives and where we saw ourselves in twenty years. Feeling confident about my plans, I stood up first and shared that I wanted to go to law school and become a lawyer. The boy next to me wanted to become an engineer, and the girl next to him a doctor. Each student took their turn and shared his or her aspirations and goals.

After the last person finished the counselor stood up and pointed out that not one of us had said that happiness was a goal for their life. I began to imagine my life as a lawyer and quickly realized that I had no passion for law. Although I could potentially make plenty of money I could never truly be happy as a lawyer. How could I have crafted this elaborate plan for my life without once considering my happiness?

It was at this moment that I realized that success is not defined by how much money you make, but rather, whether or not you pursued your passion. I had nearly made the mistake of sacrificing my happiness for a false ideal of success. From this simple activity I learned that true success has no correlation to monetary value, true success is the ability to reminisce over your life without regrets. Success is to be happy.

Great job on the prompt, it fully addresses the question, shows your bravery and the lesson you have learned over the past four years.

If you want to make it better you can summarize the first paragraph, and towards the end add the what you want to study and how the lesson helped you decide that.

or
you can tie in the lesson with the qualities GW and how the university will make you happy...how it fits your definition of success.

besides these few changes of improvement, check form grammar issues and this prompt should be ready for submisssion.
Good Luck! :)

Nearly two years ago I sat in a room with fifteen other teenagers at a youth conference. We went around the room and shared what we wanted to do with our lives and where we saw ourselves in twenty years. Feeling confident about my plans, I stood up first and shared that I wanted to go to law school to become a lawyer. The boy next to me wanted to become an engineer and the girl next to him a doctor. Each student took their turn and shared his or her aspirations and goals.

After the last person finished, the counselor stood up and pointed out that not one of us had said that happiness was a goal for their life . I began to imagine my life as a lawyer and quickly realized that I had no passion for law. Although I could potentially make plenty of money, I could never truly be happy as a lawyer. How could I have crafted this elaborate plan for my life without once considering my happiness?

It was at this moment that I realized that success is not defined by how much money you make, but rather, whether or not you pursued your passion. I had nearly made the mistake of sacrificing my happiness for a false ideal of success. From this simple activity I learned that true success has no correlation to monetary value, true success is the ability to reminisce over your life without regrets. Success is to be happy.

What is your career goal now? I say address the first option the previous answer gave.