"What is diversity?" - Diversity and How I can Contribute ESSAY

Prompt: Provide your definition of diversity and explain how you can contribute to diversity at the University of ********.

Response: (I have yet to finish this but i need some advice, i'm having a writers block)

What is diversity? Diversity is understanding, accepting, and respecting that everyone is unique and has their own differences. Whether the difference is race, ethnicity, age, gender, religious beliefs, sexual orientation, physical ability and other ideologies the concept of diversity is to be able to provide a safe, positive, and accepting environment.

I can contribute to the diversity at University of ********, by numerous characteristics. My straight forward open mind allows me to tell you how I feel about a certain aspect honestly, while also being able to listen to my peers - accepting and taking into consideration their point of view. I'm very tolerant, and accept everyone for who they are, no matter what their difference is from because I never know what they have been through or their stories. Plus, I treat everyone the way I want to be treated. I personally have several other differences compared to everyone else, which I believe will provide a great asset to the University of ********'s campus. Growing up I came from a lower class family, dad never home and my parents got a divorce last year. I understand the struggle some people may be going through and I could provide a positive outlook for them, to show them that they can succeed and it will not always be a difficult struggle.

( this is the last half i came up with)

Two of my main hobbies, have taught me several characteristic, and aspects that I believe could help better any diversity. I grew up around horses my whole life. Horseback riding taught me how to have courage, self-esteem and determination ; three traits a significant amount of teenagers and young adults lack or have tad bit of. These traits will benefit the diversity because I could provide a positive and encouraging environment around me, to help my peers succeed. My other hobby ; fire fighting has taught me, patience, safety, and that everyone has a support system even though it may not seem like it. Going into a university may be rough for the upcoming freshman class, they may think noone is there for them, because we don't know one another. Maybe even try to rush through everything just to get it over with. I can show others that there will always be at least ONE person there for them, to support them; that person would be me. A little bit of support can go a long way in a big world - sometimes that is all a person needs.

Diversity is everywhere you go, there is no way to get around it. I may not come from a different country, or have an unusual family background that makes me completely diverse like others, but I have a strong grasp around the general concept that allows me to devote my personality, and specific characteristics to a community/environment/campus to better it in time and I would love to have the chance to prove that at the University of ********.

PLEASE critique , I had a major writers block & just wrote what came to mind, all advice is appreciated

Great content! If you're able to edit the overall flow of the essay, I think that it will be spot-on. For example, try to stray away from the very list-like style of writing. (if list-like is a word? let's just pretend that it is.)

Thanks Hannah, I kind of figured. I have to figure out how exactly to do that. I know i need transitions .

P.S... The attitude of servitude that you display in this essay is great. I think that colleges are really looking for that unselfish trait. Good stuff! (: