I just need some suggestions. Let me know if there is anything I should improve on or add.
For applicants to Columbia College, please tell us what from your current and past experiences (either academic or personal) attracts you specifically to the field or fields of study that you noted in the Member Questions section. If you are currently undecided, please write about any field or fields in which you may have an interest at this time. (300 words or less)
The field of economics is most appealing to me at Columbia University. I have recently come to find this field most interesting based on attending a college information session, my dream of becoming a corporate lawyer, and from what I have learned in my Civics and Economics class.
Last month, I attended a college information session. At this event, a department chair from the communications department said "Don't choose a major as if you are looking for a job." This definitely stuck with me because I have always been indecisive about what I wanted my intended major to be. I soon realized that a major does not have to define me for the rest of my life, which is why I decided to become an economics major.
I believe economics is a major that will always be in demand; this area of study will always be important as long as economies exist. Economics can help me understand how a society distributes its resources and how its decision affects society.
I eventually want to become a corporate lawyer. Economics is a major used to gain an understanding of the business world and I think this will provide me with a great basis in order to become a corporate lawyer.
I am currently taking Civics & Economics in school and it has inspired me when choosing my field of study. I enjoy analyzing situations and understanding them fully and majoring in economics will help me with this. I appreciate learning at a fast pace and I want to continuously learn new things.
I want to receive the best education I possibly can. Columbia University's Department of Economics will allow me to do so. To build the basis of my future career out of the degree I earn at Columbia is my ultimate goal.
It's good, but I just had the feeling that you're repeating yourself, try to avoid this :)
I feel you did a good job at answering the question, and gave a clear reason as to why you picked your field. The only thing I can suggest is maybe switching up the order of the paragraphs, or adding in transition sentences if the word limit allows. Right now, it feels just a tad bit choppy. But that's just being nit-picky; other than that, I think it's a good essay.
Thank you all for your help, I deeply appreciate it.
@mrf18, I understand what you meant by changing the order of the paragraph. I switched the 2nd and 3rd paragraph position and I think it flows much better.