If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.) (489 characters/500 characters)
With my love and passion for musical theater, I would love to spend a day in New York City with Idina Menzel. We would first watch "Wicked" together, and with her connections, go backstage to meet the cast members, directors, see the costumes and makeup, and learn about the production of the show. Afterwards, we would head to a nearby coffee shop, where we would talk about our favorite musicals, our favorite musical songs, and what broadway shows we each wished we could have seen.
Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
All these hopes and dreams
All of these aspirations
One day will come true
In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line. (553 characters/500 characters; NEED TO CUT DOWN THE FAT :])
Defying Gravity, Regina is the middle child in a large immigrant family. She is overshadowed by her older sisters accomplishments, & her parents finances have been exhausted due to health & spending on the rest of her siblings. Nothing is expected from her, but she has large dreams. She works hard to prove herself to her family, gets into a nationally acclaimed university, raises money to attend school, goes on to medical school, and finally becomes a doctor. She ultimately gives back to her family, and helps her younger siblings attend college.
Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline. (448 characters/500)
My interest in the medical field has stemmed from my dad's recent bout of heart failure. Having witnessed first hand the pain and suffering caused by medical problems, I have been enlightened on what I really want to do- relieve peoples suffering, and be instrument of healing. If given the chance to attend NYU, I would take advantage by learning from the New York community, and pursue my interests not only intellectually, but also creatively.
Regina is the middle child in a large immigrant family
Regina is part of?
can you read my essay, very short, it's a conversation lol
scroll down to read new version.
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not sure you can use that...
also you are missing a title for the movie( I DID TOOOOOOOOOO DAM).
Haha. I'm just trying to cut down on the characters. I hope it's not breaking the rules or anything by using the sign instead.
My title is "Defying Gravity" and stated right before the story. Lol. If you have any more suggestions please let me know!
Your haiku is very generic. Try to choose something more specific. Even if it's generic it will at least be specific.
I think you can cut out this sentence to make your essay shorter
Nothing is expected from her, but she has large dreams.
and write out your &.
I think you should write a 8-lined poem instead of a haiku.
Then you can put more description.
Please critique mine as well!
Haiku:
Dirt on my fingers,
Sore in my legs, butt, and arms
I am still climbing
did i follow the rules? is this a haiku? 5,7,5?
I briefly saw the NYU application. decided last second not to apply :( it wasn't on the top of my list, though i did find it extraordinary!
This haiku is just for fun. probably the one i was going to do (it shows determination!). feel free to use it, class of 2015!
If you had the opportunity to spend one day in New York City with a famous New Yorker, who would it be and what would you do? (Your New Yorker can be anyone -past or present, fictional or nonfictional - who is commonly associated with New York City; they do not necessarily have to have been born and raised in New York.) (489 characters/500 characters)
With my love and passion for musical theater, I would love to spend a day in New York City with Idina Menzel. We would first watch "Wicked" together, and with her connections, go backstage to meet the cast members, directors, see the costumes and makeup, and learn [implies you both would learn. she probably wouldn't] about the production of the show. Afterward , we would head to a nearby coffee shop, where we would talk about our favorite musicals, our favorite musical songs, and what B roadway shows we each wished we could have seen.
Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you.
All these hopes and dreams
All of these aspirations
One day will come true
Trite and generic. This tells me nothing about you that's different from the 32434 other driven kids applying to NYU.
In the year 2050, a movie is being made of your life. Please tell us the name of your movie and briefly summarize the story line. (553 characters/500 characters; NEED TO CUT DOWN THE FAT :])
Defying Gravity, Regina is the middle child in a large immigrant family. She is overshadowed by her older sisters accomplishments, & her parents finances have been exhausted due to health & spending on the rest of her siblings. Nothing is expected from her, but she has large dreams. She works hard to prove herself to her family, gets into a nationally acclaimed university, raises money to attend school, goes on to medical school, and finally becomes a doctor. She ultimately gives back to her family, and helps her younger siblings attend college.
Seems pointed to "NYU is critical in my life plan," but otherwise fine.
Please tell us what led you to select your anticipated academic program and/or NYU school/college, and what interests you most about your intended discipline. (448 characters/500)
My interest in the medical field has stemmed from my dad's recent bout of heart failure. Having witnessed first hand the pain and suffering caused by medical problems, I have been enlightened on what I really want to do- relieve peoples suffering, and be instrument of healing. If given the chance to attend NYU, I would take advantage by learning from the New York community, and pursue my interests not only intellectually, but also creatively.
Great job here.
I like the new Haiku now. It improved over the one I told you to rewrite about.
