"A Fan of giving; I am much more than 250 words" Stanford Roommate Prompt

Dear Future Roommate,
I cannot completely introduce myself to you in 250 words, but here is my best attempt.
I am a very athletic person. Figure skating and swimming have taken up a large chunk of my time, but I am excited about sharing all that with you! If you have never skated before, rest assured, after a year with me, you will come to love it.

I love to cook (my sisters say I am pretty good at it too). I sincerely hope you are not watching your weight. Who else is going to taste my many culinary concoctions?

I am a huge fan of giving. Giving time, giving love, giving hope. A huge portion of my life is devoted to helping others. Every year for Christmas, I make "no-sew" blankets -- some for my friends, and some for a local homeless shelter. You must tell me your favorite colors/patterns so I can make one for you too!

I love pondering various philosophical topics. My mom often says that I "wander." But in the words of DevilDriver, not all who wander are lost. When I was at home, my dad was my debate partner. We seldom agreed, but that was the best part! I'm hoping that now, you will be my new discussion partner.

I am random and spontaneous. Often times, I may do something for no apparent reason. Baking brownies, dancing around the room, or just blowing my vuvuzela are all subject to my casual whims. But trust me, it's all in good fun!

I am pretty much equatable to an iceberg. This letter only conveys the "tip of the iceberg."
In time, however, you will come to learn much more about the 80% of Sneha Singh that lies underwater.

I am looking forward to a wonderfully exciting year together!
-Sneha

comments?

Personally, i think that referring to the prompt brings the reader out of the letter illusion and resultantly your response loses power.

I actually like the 250 words part. It shows that you know who you are and it also shows that the qualities you wrote about are your best. It also ties in with the 80% part at the end.

I don't see any grammar errors and I like it :)
I see your personality and enthusiam.

goooooood luck~

you might want to glance at how you start your sentences; a lot of "I am" - vary it and add a little color! Otherwise great!

Personally, I don't think you should talk about 20 different things at once. Like you said, it is only the "tip of the iceberg". Therefore, you should focus on one or two aspects of your personality that stands out the MOST. A lot of people are athletic, a lot are of people love to cook, you get the point. What sets you apart? Convey that and you just nailed this essay :)

thanks a lot guys!
i really appreciate it!