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TopicC: Considering your lifetime goals, discuss how your current and future academic and extra-curricular activities might help you achieve your goals.
Friday night. The stands are filled with men, women, teenagers and kids screaming with their hands in the air as the star students makes their way across the field. The bright lights shining down upon everyone while vendors walk around naming out the different delicious snacks being offered by the concession stands. Signs fill up the front section of the seats with negative school friendly slurs at the opposing team. High pitches cheers come from the cheerleaders as the stand on the sideline cheering on. Sweat drips down everyone's face on the field while their lungs fight for air and their legs try not to fail on them. "It's almost over...it's almost over" they think in their head trying to motivate themselves. With one last step, the last ring is heard across the stadium and the drum majors land in their spit. I smile at the crowd and embraced the cheers. The marching band half time show had ended.
Being in band was never something I had imagine in my future. To be quite honest, I hated going to music class in elementary school, it was pointless to me. I didn't care if the note in the second line was a G. I didn't care if 4/4 meant 4 beats per measure. When was all of that going to help me later in life? How is this even important? But little did I know that knowing all of this would only be the beginning of the 7 year long journey to form the person I am today.
Before joining band I was always the odd one out. I never knew enough. I never had enough. I was never enough. All I ever wanted was to fit in and have friends that appreciated me for me. Which is why I chose band as my elective in sixth grade. If I wasn't going to fit in, I might as well do it with others who also don't fit in. I was quick to judge the band and soon found out that the people in the program were a mix of the different kids in school. We had the trouble makers, the smart ones, the clowns and the list would go on. I soon became friends with all of them and began to realize that maybe joining band might have been the best decision I had ever made.
After months of hard work I was selected to become the first chair saxophone player and was in charge of 5 other students. All my life I had followed my friends like a lost little puppy and suddenly I was the leader of the saxophone section. The feeling of finally being the role model for other was people was something that I had never thought I would experience. Although it was a huge responsibility I did not walk away from it and challenged myself to be the best for these students. I was there for them when they needed assistance. I motivated them to learn beyond what was written on the music. I was always there for them when our director wasn't. I was learning the skills to become a great leader.
When I entered high school, everything had changed. The old shy me was replaced by an outstanding leader who wanted nothing more than to be the best at what she wished. This band, however, was different from my middle school band. Here only the best and exceptional students could join to represent not only the band, but also our school. This organization taught me the values of leadership, independence, sacrifices, and hard work. We were the students who showed everyone else what a model kid was supposed to act like. Our reputation was spotless and dead on the best in the whole school. We were the best and everyone knew that.
Looking back at my 6 and a half years of band I can see a difference in my persona. I started off being the follower but turned into the leader I am today. Although I am still not done with my last year of band, I know that what is to come will only help me more. Because of band I now know that I when I pursue my career in the future I will try to become an even greater leader. I will not give up when things get tough and will fight to finish. I will set an example for everyone and show that if I can do it so can they.
TopicC: Considering your lifetime goals, discuss how your current and future academic and extra-curricular activities might help you achieve your goals.
Friday night. The stands are filled with men, women, teenagers and kids screaming with their hands in the air as the star students makes their way across the field. The bright lights shining down upon everyone while vendors walk around naming out the different delicious snacks being offered by the concession stands. Signs fill up the front section of the seats with negative school friendly slurs at the opposing team. High pitches cheers come from the cheerleaders as the stand on the sideline cheering on. Sweat drips down everyone's face on the field while their lungs fight for air and their legs try not to fail on them. "It's almost over...it's almost over" they think in their head trying to motivate themselves. With one last step, the last ring is heard across the stadium and the drum majors land in their spit. I smile at the crowd and embraced the cheers. The marching band half time show had ended.
Being in band was never something I had imagine in my future. To be quite honest, I hated going to music class in elementary school, it was pointless to me. I didn't care if the note in the second line was a G. I didn't care if 4/4 meant 4 beats per measure. When was all of that going to help me later in life? How is this even important? But little did I know that knowing all of this would only be the beginning of the 7 year long journey to form the person I am today.
Before joining band I was always the odd one out. I never knew enough. I never had enough. I was never enough. All I ever wanted was to fit in and have friends that appreciated me for me. Which is why I chose band as my elective in sixth grade. If I wasn't going to fit in, I might as well do it with others who also don't fit in. I was quick to judge the band and soon found out that the people in the program were a mix of the different kids in school. We had the trouble makers, the smart ones, the clowns and the list would go on. I soon became friends with all of them and began to realize that maybe joining band might have been the best decision I had ever made.
After months of hard work I was selected to become the first chair saxophone player and was in charge of 5 other students. All my life I had followed my friends like a lost little puppy and suddenly I was the leader of the saxophone section. The feeling of finally being the role model for other was people was something that I had never thought I would experience. Although it was a huge responsibility I did not walk away from it and challenged myself to be the best for these students. I was there for them when they needed assistance. I motivated them to learn beyond what was written on the music. I was always there for them when our director wasn't. I was learning the skills to become a great leader.
When I entered high school, everything had changed. The old shy me was replaced by an outstanding leader who wanted nothing more than to be the best at what she wished. This band, however, was different from my middle school band. Here only the best and exceptional students could join to represent not only the band, but also our school. This organization taught me the values of leadership, independence, sacrifices, and hard work. We were the students who showed everyone else what a model kid was supposed to act like. Our reputation was spotless and dead on the best in the whole school. We were the best and everyone knew that.
Looking back at my 6 and a half years of band I can see a difference in my persona. I started off being the follower but turned into the leader I am today. Although I am still not done with my last year of band, I know that what is to come will only help me more. Because of band I now know that I when I pursue my career in the future I will try to become an even greater leader. I will not give up when things get tough and will fight to finish. I will set an example for everyone and show that if I can do it so can they.
