In my free time, I trawl the net, looking for physics problems.

Hi. I would like some help with this one...

The Prompt:
We know you lead a busy life, full of activities, many of which are required of you. Tell us about something you do for the pleasure of it. (*)(100 words or fewer)

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In my free time, I trawl the net, looking for physics problems. I feel sheer pleasure when, after a couple of pages of furious solving, i look up and see my answer match the one in front of my eyes. It is an intense and addictive experience. Like Feynman once said, "Physics is like s**:sure, it may give some practical results, but that's not why we do it."

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all sort of editing, no matter how furious is welcome

thanks

I will star by telling you that writing is by no means one of my strenghts. I just want to give you my point of view.

I look up and see my answer match the one in front of my eyes.
This is very vague. You could perfectly be seeing a wrong answer!

Other thing:
Even though the final quote might express what you feel, I am not sure it is appropiate for this. However, that is my perception.

What is really important is that you exploit all the room you have for this answer.
Believe me, I am applying to MIT too and the lack of room is one of my headaches.
Furthermore, half of the answer is YOUR voice and the other half is Feynman's.
So, try to add something else.

Hope it helps,
GOOD LUCK! :)

I like what you did with this prompt. you let the reader know of your passion in a very concise manner, and i think it is done well. the only thing, i have to agree, is the quote. i like where you are going by adding a quote in on the end, i just don't think it relates enough to your answer. maybe its just me, but i honestly didn't really see it. other than that, i think its a very good piece. good luck!

thanks guys, you were a lot of help

In my free time, I trawl the Internet , looking for physics problems.

What do you mean about "physics is like *****" ? I don't get it! :-)

I agree with Nick, as great as Feynman's quotes are, this one is just too edgy. Not to mention it takes up valuable space. Maybe you could talk about how you feel when you see physics in real life.