My friends and family hold great trust in me and would describe me as ...

Who are you, how would your family, friends, and members of the community describe you?

Growing up in a joint family has inherited many values and ethical teaching that one own knowledge, experience, and hard work can only be the way to success. As I grew up watching my father getting advice from the elders of the family no matter how simple the topic would be he always took advice from grandparents, this inherited a sense in me that experience is what tells you teachings of life and develops skills, that is when I started to gather experiences of my likings. Being the elder child of the family I experienced challenges from younger children, therefore I became more patient and responsible. I learned to make better decisions with time and handle situations under various challenging circumstances. Consequently, this developed my personality as a poised person.

My friends and family hold great trust in me and would describe me as a very supportive, hardworking, and helpful person. Commonly, they call me tech-savvy as any kind of technical support I always get it sorted. My family believes and says I don't give up in any circumstances and challenge myself to reach the desired goal. The faith I have developed among my friends holds great importance to me as my friends always look forward to discussing their personal obstacles with me. I will be loyal and supportive to the people in my life and would give the best of my knowledge and assistance whenever required by them.

Something I feel that I am most proud of is my behavior to accept and adapt new things instantaneously. During my childhood, I was very shy and would sometimes leave things and opportunities out of fear, but as I grew up I have done activities that have significantly pushed myself out of my weak zone, a remarkable example would be sports and going on in the community events that changed my attitude towards trying and attending new things, further I started actively participating in inter-school competitions. Within the past few years, I have not only overcome my fears but have gathered immense experience, I won prizes as well as certificates of active participation, even though in some competitions I only participated but this journey brought me some of the finest experiences I could ever have in my school.

The first paragraph is a reference to your idea of who you are. It does not refer to an opinion for the specified parties. This introduction is not needed in a word limited essay. Delete it. You may skip directly to the joint discussion instead. Although, the joint discussion defeats the purpose of the statement. The idea is to allow the removeus to get to know your multi-faceted character based upon how differently various people interact with you. While the combined insight is easier to write, it makes you hold back on character development. Try to individualize this point of view aspect for a wider character presentation.


Do not include personal notes. The opinions have to come from other parties.

You can use the "proud of" reference as is.

Hii! This is not professional advice, just a peer-to-peer review based on what I've learned from past applicants & seniors:

1. The first line/paragraph determines the impression you will have on the reader hence I think it will be more helpful if the first line is all about you & gives more insight into your personality because that's what the prompt is asking for so that it captivates their attention right away.

2. Do double-check whether you have forgotten to mention any important quality of yours like leadership, humor, etc as the prompt is more focused on your personality instead of just achievements.

Aside from that, I loved your concluding paragraph. Hope it was helpful. Have a great day!