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short fuse guy - ubc personal profile. who i am what/im proud of/how would people describe me



ghosthunter81734 1 / -  
Dec 31, 2024   #1
In grade two, he was the kid who flipped a desk on the principal's foot, earning the label 'problem child,' and they were right. Despite his numerous visits to various therapists and his parents trying everything, nothing seemed to help at the time. By grade four, he had built a reputation for rampaging and recklessness. He was more often in the principal's office than in class.

As he transitioned into middle school, he noticed that although some still looked at him with fearful eyes, he began to understand that labels are not permanent. While the 'problem child' was still there, it faded and became milder over time. Trouble was now a rarity, and by high school, it had disappeared. As he grew out of his past struggles, changes slowly began to take shape in the form of improved marks. From C's in grade 9 to B's in grade 10, and finally to straight A's in grade 11. His parents would now describe him as an outgoing and hard-working young man, though his friends would say he was sarcastic and had a short fuse.

His growth culminated when the city of_hired him as a lifeguard. As a lifeguard, he needed to have the responsibility and leadership needed to represent the city. Entrusted with the safety and lives of hundreds of patrons, every shift was not just a duty but a testament to his growth. While building meaningful relationships with co-workers and patrons, he became someone others could rely on-a empathetic and friendly figure open to all.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15492  
Dec 31, 2024   #2
You are using the correct pronounce reference in the essay, which is a good start.The problem, is that you are not dividing the essay into the required community memberships as indicated in the prompt requirement. You are also starting the story way too far in your past for it to make any sense to the reviewer. You should be starting from your most recent high school and community organization memberships. I am afraid that you cannot use this specific version for your application. My advice, is that you write a new essay that better considers your recent activities in various settings, then tie those into what you are most proud of. You can use the lifeguard story once you fix the community story.
Edukid2309 4 / 8  
2 days ago   #3
It would be better if you could extend and clarify the character development to make a better profile


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