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(Geography teacher, Physics, United Nations, Learning, Books) Carleton College

ruzhang143 3 / 16  
Nov 7, 2009   #1
I am applying for Carleton under the early decision program so it's kind of urgent. Anybody please give some comments on these. The worlds are limited. Thank you for consideration.

Carleton Short answers

Q1. Which secondary school teacher has most influenced you and briefly explain why.ïźˆ<200 charactersïź‰

(Geography teacher)

A: He set high standards for me, making me a dedicated class leader. He pictured the world for us, and became our friend in life. I shared my feelings deep inside with him and received great inspiration.

Q2. What subjects most interest you and why? (Note: This is not a commitment to major in this area.)(<400 characters)

A: Physics excites me because it uncovers the mysteries closely related to life. I also enjoy chemistry because it helps me understand fascinating changes. I particularly favor history for it grants me the opportunity to understand the world and learn from yesterday. China has a history of 5000 years. The intriguing stories of my homeland fostered my intense love for the mysterious past of mankind.

Q3. Do you have a tentative (or firm) career plan (or dream)? Please describe it. (<400 characters)

A: I dream to be a United Nations messenger of peace. I always believe that if we can seek the cultural bond among us and use diversity to generate more power instead of cause conflict, the world would be a better place. I want to join Carleton to learn to take responsibility and enrich my knowledge and skill, and seek common ground for humanity in the near future.

Q4. Why are you interested in Carleton College and how did this interest develop?(<300 characters)

A: I am passionate about my learning and equally intent on sharing interests with the slightly unusual and diverse companions. Carleton is the place for me to meet inspiring challenges and intellectual friends, learn to be a responsible and dedicated leader, and take a step closer towards my dream.

Q5. From your reading, whether children's books or classics, what books or authors have particularly impressed you and why?(<500 characters)

A: David Copperfield taught me more than just friendship and love. It made me understand that we must choose lives for ourselves. Some people seek pleasure while others always strive for the best. David Copperfield is one of the latter. He had been tortured, deceived and frustrated, but he never gave up and succeeded in the end. He made me believe that real love and truth are stronger than any evil or misfortune in the world. Every cloud has its silver lining, and so does "the cloud of life".
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Nov 7, 2009   #2
Instead of writing geography teacher in parentheses, use it as the subject of your first sentence. My geography teacher...

I think that answer, about the geography teacher, is too general. You should quote something he said ot reflect on a moment when he made you realize something about what you want to do in life.

When you write about the subjects that interest you, it is a good opportunity to sow off what you know. For example, what do you know about the work being done by modern physicists who use particle accelerators? Show that you are so interested that you are already becoming knowledgeable about the field.

Excellent! I like your answers, and I am excited about your future with the UN!! As you keep working on these, focus on showing how focused you are on achieving your goals, and take every opportunity to mention ways that this school, with its specific resources, will help you.
OP ruzhang143 3 / 16  
Nov 8, 2009   #3
Thanks! Really appreciate your comments. I'll work more on these.

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