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'I grew up here, in Ohio' - Why are you interested in Ohio State?



nak2011 2 / 1  
Aug 30, 2010   #1
This is my addmissions essay for ohio state " Why are you interested in Ohio State?" and i would like to get some input on things i could change or do better on.

Ohio State is a great school that is known for their high academic standards as well as their student body leadership programs. I am interested in a school that will not only challenge me mentally but will also fit my personality and I see Ohio State as a perfect fit for me. In high school I took many leadership roles in clubs, as well as in my class and I know that attending Ohio State, it will help me grow as a leader and learn about my self in the process. A big draw for me from the school is the top nursing program it provides. I plan on becoming a nurse anesthetist and will have to earn a nursing degree first but I know receiving a degree from this well respected program will not only give me the knowledge but the confidence to enter this competitive field.

Growing up in Ohio I have had family and friends that have attended Ohio State and have seen and heard how the experience has shaped their lives. My family members' say it was the best time of their lives and that the teaching staff is amazing, from hearing these reviews it show that the experience is more then words on paper. I am quite interested in the cultural experience of the campus due to the fact I am from such a small town. I love to watch football and be around the excitement of school events, so having the Ohio State football team that goes along with this magnificent school is only a perk. There is many reason I am interested in this school from its academics to sport programs but the main reason I have chosen to apply to Ohio State is for the pure fact that I feel it fits me and really represent who I am and will hopefully be shaped into.

patricia5827 4 / 12  
Aug 30, 2010   #2
This is just my opinion, but i think the last paragraph should be first, just flip them. It sounds better
ktsmith316 1 / 3  
Aug 31, 2010   #3
I agree, switch them.
good job writing about yourself and what interests you
maybe explain why they should pick you.
Eram09 1 / 3  
Aug 31, 2010   #4
It's nice and yes I agree with the people above regarding the flipping of the last few sentences.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Sep 1, 2010   #5
Okay, this is good, but I think it will be better if you talk more about your philosophy of nursing, your reasons for choosing anesthesia, and the school's specific classes that you look forward to completing.


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