Hi! I just want to get some last minute thoughts on part of my Brown University essay. The character limit is 2000, unfortunately, and it was very difficult for me to condense. Any criticism will be greatly appreciated! Thank you very much!
Why are you going to college?
One of my strongest desires in going to college is to receive a high quality of education. Education is an undeniably important aspect of life; it provides the tools for people to think critically and understand the world around them. Not only that, learning is enjoyable - at least it is for me. One of the main reasons I am going to college is to be able to quell my insatiable hunger for learning; something that I was not able to achieve in high school. A high school education can only provide a person with so much; it is the post-secondary world that truly helps develop an individual's intellectual ability. In addition, I believe that college is the optimum route in achieving a stable career. More and more employers require an undergraduate degree - if not higher - which makes it almost obligatory to attend college now. Therefore, with a college education, there is more flexibility in choosing a career path, as well as an increased amount of opportunities.
Although the academic aspect of attending university is very important, it is not the sole reason I would like to go. Going to college is a universal life experience; it is the transition between adolescence to adulthood. Going away for college will be my first prospect at what life in the working world is truly like; filled with both freedom and responsibilities alike. Although there will be nobody to tell me to clean my room or wash the dishes, I will be solely responsible for my actions. College will also help me get to know countless new people. I will be meeting people from many ethnicities and cultures, allowing me to learn about them and, in turn, tell them about myself. Going to college is more than just getting a letter on a piece of paper, it is a stage that is designed to prepare one for the working world, as well as provide a set of life experiences needed for success. I am excited at the prospect of finally beginning to explore the world for myself, and my first stop on that journey is college.
Why are you going to college?
One of my strongest desires in going to college is to receive a high quality of education. Education is an undeniably important aspect of life; it provides the tools for people to think critically and understand the world around them. Not only that, learning is enjoyable - at least it is for me. One of the main reasons I am going to college is to be able to quell my insatiable hunger for learning; something that I was not able to achieve in high school. A high school education can only provide a person with so much; it is the post-secondary world that truly helps develop an individual's intellectual ability. In addition, I believe that college is the optimum route in achieving a stable career. More and more employers require an undergraduate degree - if not higher - which makes it almost obligatory to attend college now. Therefore, with a college education, there is more flexibility in choosing a career path, as well as an increased amount of opportunities.
Although the academic aspect of attending university is very important, it is not the sole reason I would like to go. Going to college is a universal life experience; it is the transition between adolescence to adulthood. Going away for college will be my first prospect at what life in the working world is truly like; filled with both freedom and responsibilities alike. Although there will be nobody to tell me to clean my room or wash the dishes, I will be solely responsible for my actions. College will also help me get to know countless new people. I will be meeting people from many ethnicities and cultures, allowing me to learn about them and, in turn, tell them about myself. Going to college is more than just getting a letter on a piece of paper, it is a stage that is designed to prepare one for the working world, as well as provide a set of life experiences needed for success. I am excited at the prospect of finally beginning to explore the world for myself, and my first stop on that journey is college.
