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"As an imminent chemical engineer..." - Stony Brook University Supplement Common App


aakash988 4 / 6  
Jan 14, 2011   #1
I have 1,624 characters in this essay and my limit is 1,500. Any suggestions on cutting it down and making it stand out will be much appreciated!

Briefly state why you are considering Stony Brook University:

What appeals to me the most about Stony Brook University is the amount of research and academic opportunities that it offers to undergraduates. When I first read about "URECA," an acronym for "Undergraduate Research and Creative Activities" it strangely sounded a lot like "Eureka," a term coined by Archimedes that expresses triumph of discovering or solving something. That is exactly what I hope to do at this university. By interacting with research mentors and creating research projects, I will be able to discover new things and expand my knowledge beyond the classroom. Furthermore, 'Celebration of Undergraduate Research & Creativity' a scholastic celebration through URECA, will permit me to present my own research to undergraduates and familiarize myself with research conducted by my fellow peers. It will truly be a stimulating experience.

As an imminent chemical engineer, another reason why I am considering Stony Brook University is because of its strong dedication to science and engineering. The Chemical and Molecular Engineering department at Stony Brook University will force me to connect notional ideas learnt in the classroom with hands-on experience. Located a few miles from the main campus, The Brookhaven National Laboratory will give me the ability to utilize state-of-the-art research facilities. Additionally, from the internships available at the university, I will gain communication, management, and collaborative skills that will help me in my pursuit of becoming a chemical engineer.

The opportunities are endless and with an education from Stony Brook University, I can only succeed.
marvi92 3 / 5  
Jan 14, 2011   #2
I really like your response especially the Eureka part.

Maybe you should cut this sentence out:

The Chemical and Molecular Engineering department at Stony Brook University will force me to connect notional ideas learnt in the classroom with hands-on experience.

It sounds weird when you say "department at Stony Brook University will force me"


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