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danimeep 8 / 25  
Feb 18, 2013   #1
Please provide a statement (250 words minimum) that addresses your reasons for transferring and the objectives you hope to achieve.

My first day of college came with a surprise. I always knew introductory classes were large, but I never expected to find myself feeling so small. Over the loud murmur of students, I heard my roommate's voice in the distance. She yelled for me, "Dani! Over here!" I scanned the sea of bodies until I found her. I weaved my way over. "Can you believe there are 800 students in our Calculus class?" she asked. Quite frankly, I couldn't. I had never been part of such a large group before. My high school's graduating class was merely 85 students, and the college course I enrolled in during my senior year had a total class size of 14 students.

For the next ten weeks, I found it increasingly difficult to connect with my professors. My e-mails were rarely replied to, and graduate students directed a majority of the office hours. It was hard to establish a personal relationship with my teachers when I rarely had the chance speak with them. This disconnect with my teachers felt very strange to me. During high school we called our teachers by their first names and even brought them Starbucks in the mornings. The connections I had with my high school teachers encouraged me to ask questions, better understand the material, and explore my potential as a student.

My experiences in such a large school helped me realize what is important to my education. I decided to leave Santa Barbara and continue my academic career by enrolling in a community college close to home. Some view my decision to come home so soon as a risk, but I know it was well worth it. I had time to further develop my interests and attain a sense of what education style works best for me.

Attending UCSB did much more than just help me realize what I want in a school. It gave me the opportunity to learn from a different type of education, establish my independency, and experience what it was like living away from home. Although I enjoyed my personal experiences at UCSB, I feel that I would benefit from a smaller school that personally engages students' intellectual growth.

As a transfer student, I am once again ready for a new change. I am not looking to join a sorority or rally at a college football game. I'm looking for a genuine college experience, a place where I can further develop my interests, study abroad, and share life-changing experiences with a diverse student body. I have no doubt that I will thrive at a new college that can assist my passions. I am positive that I will blossom into the liberally educated and responsible young woman I aspire to be. Most importantly, I am wholeheartedly ready to grow and succeed; change awaits me. Life awaits me.

ana93 1 / 6  
Feb 19, 2013   #2
Your conclusion is very descriptive. Is there a way you can add how your transfer school will provide you the "genuine college experience". What is about that school that differs from UCSB and why are you attracted to it? Also,you might want to include in your first paragraph that you were attending UCSB, I was under the impression you are transferring to UCSB towards the middle. It was a little confusing.
Goingsomewhere 1 / 4  
Feb 20, 2013   #3
Think about this... I am a transfer student and I want to transfer because I have adsorbed all I can at my current school. I looking for a change and a challenge. Also a change of scenery those are just the reasons I am transferring this semester. Hope I helped getting you thinking.
OP danimeep 8 / 25  
Feb 20, 2013   #4
Didgeridoo, I really appreciate all your help and feedback. What is your opinion on my essay? Do you think I need to change my writing style a bit? Do you think it needs to be more personalized? Is it interesting to read; if not, how can I make it interesting to the reader?
Didgeridoo - / 289  
Feb 20, 2013   #5
I like it! Your writing style manages to be both engaging and eloquent; it sounds very natural. The only thing I would suggest is getting more specific in your final paragraph. Why do you want to go to this college? What courses, activities, and opportunities does it offer that you are interested in, and how do you know that this one will offer you a genuine college experience?
dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 27, 2013   #6
My e-mails were rarely replied to, and graduate students directed a majority of the office hours

My e-mails were rarely responded.
and graduate students directed a majority of the office hours? I don't understand what you mean by this phrase :(
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It was hard to establish a personal relationship with my professors when I rarely had the chance to speak with them.

Having no opportunity to approach the professors, it was too hard to establish any kind of personal relationship with them.

This disconnect with my professors felt very strange to me.

I found it very strange to have such distant relationship with the professors.


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