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Nov 10, 2011 #1
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I like cheese. Correction, I love cheese. Hard cheeses, melted cheeses, string cheeses and even the pungent French cheeses. I remember one particular afternoon, sitting in my room immersed in Ghana's scorching heat. I was craving cheese. I'm not talking about the regular kind of craving; I'm talking about the "I cannot concentrate as I am too restless and the only thing that can end this annoying feeling is cheese" type of craving. I do not know how to drive. Nor is Ghana exactly the safest country to be walking in. And nor was the supermarket right by my house. I wanted cheese though. Everyone knows how I feel about cheese. I walked.
Three hours later I was sitting in my room again. Guess what? I had gotten my cheese!
Why are you interested in attending the University of Notre Dame?
I subconsciously believe that looking up universities online became a pastime for me during the last few months. Living approximately nine miles away from the United States, all I had to base my list of chosen schools on was hundreds of online reviews and search engines. Having spent my last year of high school as a boarder, I became acquainted with the beauty of community life and this has definitely played a part in my desire to attend Notre Dame. Out of the myriad of reviews I read, not a single one of them did not mention the great sense of community that exists in the school. Also hoping to study architecture, I believe that a school with a low student-faculty ratio as well as a campus size large enough to allow me to interact with a diverse student body and hence expand my knowledge is certain to help me thrive, and Notre Dame fits into this criteria.
Many people form a list of once-in-a-lifetime activities to accomplish. For example, individuals on the admissions staff hope to visit all the national parks, publish a fiction novel or waddle with penguins in Antarctica. What are a few of the items on your list?
When I think of the bucket list I have created at the back of my mind, the most recurrent item is to swim with dolphins. This is one thing I definitely need to tick off my list at one point in my life. Although most of my friends have deemed me insane for even considering it, another item at the top of my list is to go bungee-jumping; an activity that I have been increasingly interested in ever since I discovered my love for the fervor roller-coasters bring.
With my roots originating in Mali, I have spent many of my Christmas holidays in the capital and ever since I was old enough to take note of my surroundings and ever since I decided that I wanted to lead a career in architecture, I added it to my bucket list that I would like to develop a housing project there, particularly for the underprivileged. My country is one of the poorest in the world and homelessness is one of the factors hindering our development, which is something I'd like to change.
I also plan on hopefully making a pilgrimage to Mecca with my mother someday, as well as learning how to speak my grandfather's language, Sonrai.
I'd love some feedback on these essays especially in terms of content and suggestions/corrections. Especially with the first prompt. I tried to use the cheese as an anecdote about going out to get what I want and would love to know if it's too obscure or too silly to submit. Thanks in advance!
I like cheese. Correction, I love cheese. Hard cheeses, melted cheeses, string cheeses and even the pungent French cheeses. I remember one particular afternoon, sitting in my room immersed in Ghana's scorching heat. I was craving cheese. I'm not talking about the regular kind of craving; I'm talking about the "I cannot concentrate as I am too restless and the only thing that can end this annoying feeling is cheese" type of craving. I do not know how to drive. Nor is Ghana exactly the safest country to be walking in. And nor was the supermarket right by my house. I wanted cheese though. Everyone knows how I feel about cheese. I walked.
Three hours later I was sitting in my room again. Guess what? I had gotten my cheese!
Why are you interested in attending the University of Notre Dame?
I subconsciously believe that looking up universities online became a pastime for me during the last few months. Living approximately nine miles away from the United States, all I had to base my list of chosen schools on was hundreds of online reviews and search engines. Having spent my last year of high school as a boarder, I became acquainted with the beauty of community life and this has definitely played a part in my desire to attend Notre Dame. Out of the myriad of reviews I read, not a single one of them did not mention the great sense of community that exists in the school. Also hoping to study architecture, I believe that a school with a low student-faculty ratio as well as a campus size large enough to allow me to interact with a diverse student body and hence expand my knowledge is certain to help me thrive, and Notre Dame fits into this criteria.
Many people form a list of once-in-a-lifetime activities to accomplish. For example, individuals on the admissions staff hope to visit all the national parks, publish a fiction novel or waddle with penguins in Antarctica. What are a few of the items on your list?
When I think of the bucket list I have created at the back of my mind, the most recurrent item is to swim with dolphins. This is one thing I definitely need to tick off my list at one point in my life. Although most of my friends have deemed me insane for even considering it, another item at the top of my list is to go bungee-jumping; an activity that I have been increasingly interested in ever since I discovered my love for the fervor roller-coasters bring.
With my roots originating in Mali, I have spent many of my Christmas holidays in the capital and ever since I was old enough to take note of my surroundings and ever since I decided that I wanted to lead a career in architecture, I added it to my bucket list that I would like to develop a housing project there, particularly for the underprivileged. My country is one of the poorest in the world and homelessness is one of the factors hindering our development, which is something I'd like to change.
I also plan on hopefully making a pilgrimage to Mecca with my mother someday, as well as learning how to speak my grandfather's language, Sonrai.
I'd love some feedback on these essays especially in terms of content and suggestions/corrections. Especially with the first prompt. I tried to use the cheese as an anecdote about going out to get what I want and would love to know if it's too obscure or too silly to submit. Thanks in advance!