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<From Loneliness to Passion> UC prompt#1 Communications major



h19890623 2 / 3  
Nov 18, 2009   #1
Any advice or suggestions are welcomed!
Thank you so much!

Prompt #1: What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.

Four years ago, I came to the U.S. as an exchange student. I had many hard times to communicate with people. My English was poor, so mostly I could not understand what people were saying and what was going around me. Moreover, I learned that not only the language but also facial expressions and gestures were different. I became unconfident and afraid, so sadly, I rarely communicated with people for the first few weeks. However, my isolated and lonely weeks taught that I could not live without communicating. Thus, I decided to learn English and American culture through T.V. and movies. I watched them to see what American people talked about, liked, disliked, laughed at, and what kinds of body language and facial expressions they used and what they meant by that. Since I had tried to apply what I learned by T.V. and movies in my life, my confidence restored little by little. Mass media taught me English, American culture, and even a happy life! Eventually, I became the happiest and well-adjusted foreign student. This amazing experience made me want to know more about the power of communication.

My thirst for and curiosity about studying Communications has increased as I took college courses. Especially, one of the communication courses, "Journalism, Gender, and Race," was enlightening to me. I was amazed at how mass media has evolved in human history, stereotypes, ideology, and beliefs. One day, I watched the video called "Killing Us Softly," which is about how unrealistic female images in advertising affect social and psychological aspects of our lives. I felt how powerful the mass media can be and how important it is for people to be critical. After watching it, my professor asked the class, "Who designed this crazily-desire-skinny-women phenomenon?" From this discussion, I realized that people in society and mass media are deeply intertwined. This realization hugely reinforced my interest in Communications.

My internship gave me a wonderful experience of the impact of mass media on the business and individuals in the real world. I was a marketing coordinator at a healthy diet program business. I learned how to advertise the business through internet, wrote the articles on the company's blog, and communicated with the customers through emails and phones. I was excited that people all around the world responded to my advertisements and blog articles. Moreover, I talked with many women who wanted to be skinny like models in T.V. and magazines. They said they felt sad and unconfident because they thought nobody liked them. I was surprised to see in person that the images in the media even affected many individuals' psychology. Experiencing the huge impact of mass media outside of school let me feel more certain of my passion about studying Communications.

I feel lucky to live in the era of dynamic communication between individuals and culture and their application to the media. I would like to grab this opportunity to learn more about how this wonderful human instinct, communication, leads these fabulous dynamics.

ryman522 1 / 2  
Nov 19, 2009   #2
A very good essay. You give great background on why you want to be a communications major. You also incorperated what a communications does ( with media) and how it can affect lives into your essay which i thought was good.
colorfuloving 6 / 27  
Nov 19, 2009   #3
Very nice essay!
"I feel lucky to live in the era of dynamic communication between individuals and culture and their application to the media." - I really like that line [:

A few suggestions:

unconfident - you used that twice in the essay, maybe change it in one place?

I watched them to see what American people talked about, liked, disliked, laughed at, and what kinds of body language and facial expressions they used and what they meant by that. - this sentence seems a bit awkward and like a run-on. Rewording it might help [:

"Mass media taught me English, American culture, and even a happy life! " - the last part sounds sort of odd in that sentence, but it may just be me [:

Overall, good work, and I wish you luck with your goals!
-Tuhina
OP h19890623 2 / 3  
Nov 20, 2009   #4
Thanks for your help :)


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