"loved competition and teamwork" - Extracurricular Activity Short Answer

Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (150 words or fewer, 1000 character maximum).

Since I was a little boy, I have always loved competition and teamwork. And when I reached high school, I could think of no better idea except to combine my passion for learning with my desire to compete by joining the Science Olympiad team. I soon came to realize that SciOly was much more than a team; it was a family. The elders not intrigued me by relating science to life but also mentored me through the difficult transition to middle school. I remember my first SciOly competition, where I was put into the beginner team. I studied all night and day and ended up disappointed as rank 15/26. A senior came up to me and told me "Don't worry, there's always next time" and there was. I came back next year and won 2 medals. This year, I was chosen to be the Vice president and now it is my turn to not only guide the team toward victory but direct the younger students towards science.

I had way too many ideas, but i tried to put as many as I could. Also its over 150 words but under 1000 characters is that ok?

The elders not only intrigued me by relating science to life

Thanks, but how was the essay in terms of content?

Since I was a little boy

try : growing up,

omit the "and" in the second sentence

And when I reached high school, I could think of no better idea exceptthan to combine my passion for learning with my desire to competeboth passions by joining the Science Olympiad team.

The elders not only intrigued me by relating science to daily life but also mentored me through the difficult transition to (ambiguous, through middle school or from elementary school ) middle school. I remember my first SciOly competition, where when I was put into the beginner team. I studied all night and day and ended up disappointed as I was ranked 15/26 (write this out ) .

I came back next year the subsequent year and won 2 medals. This year, I was chosen to beas the Vice president and now ...

some grammar errors, please edit and revise

as for the word count, try to copy and paste into the common app, see if it allows it or not.

good luck with your applications!

Your response answer the prompt, but it felt a little bit like a laundry list of accomplishment. Maybe you'd want to dwell more on how the positive influence participating in SciOly.

Good luck :)