Prompt 1 Describe the world you come from
no one has proof read this one yet.... thats why i need you guys =)
I have seen many people who like to judge and criticize others by their facial appearances. Yet, I do not think we truly know them unless we get to know their personalities and behaviors. One of the most obnoxious facial problems that teenagers face is acne. Often time, facial acne ruins peoples' confidences and causes physiological problems. Actually, I was no exception to this. I was in the same situation before, and I remember it was just so painful to deal with acne. In school, I showed concerns that people would judge me as a person based on my look. I was too afraid to smile and look others in the eye. With friends, I felt like an outsider whenever they ask to movies or to hang out because I would always say no because I did not want people looking at me and think I did not wash my face. I worried that staying up late would cause my skin to get worse so I would literally go to sleep at 9 p.m. every night. I remember I have literally used every acne product on the shelves but none of it helped. My family would always cheer me up and always tell me "don't let acne lower your self-esteem and throw you into depression, go out more!" I had so many problems and worries in social situations because of acne and it kept me from living my life thoroughly. I felt like a total loser. I thought to myself, I would be a totally different and happier person if I had flawless skin like my friends. Finally, I decided to go to a dermatologist. The dermatologist decided to put me on a medication called Accutane- the strongest acne medication. My facial problem actually came to an end and I have realized that acne is not a permanent problem. In addition, dermatologists play an important role in teenagers' life nowadays because 90% of teenagers have/had suffered from acne. I thought to myself if I could learn more about our skin, I could have actually cured myself and other acne sufferers. I was in the same situation before and I knew how acne could affect a person both physiologically and mentally. I believe that I must acquire more knowledge about our skin before I can actually help others, thus I hope to pursue my career in dermatology.
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My AP lit teacher proof read this.. but i want more opinions =)
Prompt 2 - Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
"THE NARRATOR?" I said to myself in excitement. Will I able to handle this? If I were an actor getting ready for a performance playing the leading role, I would be happy. The anticipation of the audience and my fellow actors initiated me to walk out onto that stage. Mixed in with the excitement was a fear of failure as inescapable nerves took over. Even if I were the most passionate performer in cast, I felt the same as the rest of the cast - nervous.
Even those who claim they do not get nervous, do. No matter how hard we try, there will always be that voice in our minds questioning and doubting whether we will succeed. Fear had the power to send me out the back door, not thinking about the audience or the other actors. As the narrator, my gut filled with butterflies; I even began to sweat hysterically. What should I do? Do I stay put, paralyzed in fear for the curtain to rise, or should I run? My body stayed in a locked position and I could not think of anything. My mind was empty. What is my first line? Where am I supposed to be? Am I ready for this? Is it too late now? As the curtain rose, the spotlight fell on me, and the audience clapped. The show was ON! My feeling of fear had no option but to leave my body. Swallowing, I tasted the pungent bitterness on my throat - the sign that I was ready. I felt like I could not only pull off narrating the show, but I was now the medium of the show. Now, I just had to release my tensions and just be an excellent narrator.
When it comes to challenges, the human spirit will not fail most time. I am no exception to this. Even though I am nervous that I will embarrass myself in front of others, I push through the challenges with ambitions. I do not quit when things get hard, and I accept challenges thrown my way. Deep down, I know that I must start narrating the show and that not all this work was worth throwing away for a couple of imaginary butterflies. I think it is time to express another side of myself and really show others that I am capable of doing new things. I am glad that my teacher chose me to be the narrator for the performance because that experience helps define me as an individual with a hunger for winning. When I look back on that experience in 8th grade I hardly remember the times when my fear prevented me from achieving goals I longed for; rather, I cherish my 8th grade year as a valued gift I have used for better. Every time I am on stage, I start to remember the hardships I have gone through and realize that overcoming fear enables me to identify my talents and work with them consistently. I know that being a narrator could be challenging and maybe even devastating, - but I made it.
If life is a game, quitting will mean my life is over. The only way to get through and win is to try harder and never give up. I look back at the times I gave up, deeply regretting them every second I remember them and swear never to stop chasing after what I want. Whether it is a 5-hour SAT exam that needs to be done, or a long-term paper that needs to be finished the next day, I will not give up no matter what, until I reach my target. I will not permit myself to lose because a confident person with ambition never loses. My 8th grade performance taught me this.
Italicized = past tense ( what i thought)
normal = present ( what i think)
Thank you!!!! Please make corrections and give suggestions!! =D
no one has proof read this one yet.... thats why i need you guys =)
I have seen many people who like to judge and criticize others by their facial appearances. Yet, I do not think we truly know them unless we get to know their personalities and behaviors. One of the most obnoxious facial problems that teenagers face is acne. Often time, facial acne ruins peoples' confidences and causes physiological problems. Actually, I was no exception to this. I was in the same situation before, and I remember it was just so painful to deal with acne. In school, I showed concerns that people would judge me as a person based on my look. I was too afraid to smile and look others in the eye. With friends, I felt like an outsider whenever they ask to movies or to hang out because I would always say no because I did not want people looking at me and think I did not wash my face. I worried that staying up late would cause my skin to get worse so I would literally go to sleep at 9 p.m. every night. I remember I have literally used every acne product on the shelves but none of it helped. My family would always cheer me up and always tell me "don't let acne lower your self-esteem and throw you into depression, go out more!" I had so many problems and worries in social situations because of acne and it kept me from living my life thoroughly. I felt like a total loser. I thought to myself, I would be a totally different and happier person if I had flawless skin like my friends. Finally, I decided to go to a dermatologist. The dermatologist decided to put me on a medication called Accutane- the strongest acne medication. My facial problem actually came to an end and I have realized that acne is not a permanent problem. In addition, dermatologists play an important role in teenagers' life nowadays because 90% of teenagers have/had suffered from acne. I thought to myself if I could learn more about our skin, I could have actually cured myself and other acne sufferers. I was in the same situation before and I knew how acne could affect a person both physiologically and mentally. I believe that I must acquire more knowledge about our skin before I can actually help others, thus I hope to pursue my career in dermatology.
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My AP lit teacher proof read this.. but i want more opinions =)
Prompt 2 - Tell us about a personal quality, talent, accomplishment, contribution or experience that is important to you. What about this quality or accomplishment makes you proud and how does it relate to the person you are?
"THE NARRATOR?" I said to myself in excitement. Will I able to handle this? If I were an actor getting ready for a performance playing the leading role, I would be happy. The anticipation of the audience and my fellow actors initiated me to walk out onto that stage. Mixed in with the excitement was a fear of failure as inescapable nerves took over. Even if I were the most passionate performer in cast, I felt the same as the rest of the cast - nervous.
Even those who claim they do not get nervous, do. No matter how hard we try, there will always be that voice in our minds questioning and doubting whether we will succeed. Fear had the power to send me out the back door, not thinking about the audience or the other actors. As the narrator, my gut filled with butterflies; I even began to sweat hysterically. What should I do? Do I stay put, paralyzed in fear for the curtain to rise, or should I run? My body stayed in a locked position and I could not think of anything. My mind was empty. What is my first line? Where am I supposed to be? Am I ready for this? Is it too late now? As the curtain rose, the spotlight fell on me, and the audience clapped. The show was ON! My feeling of fear had no option but to leave my body. Swallowing, I tasted the pungent bitterness on my throat - the sign that I was ready. I felt like I could not only pull off narrating the show, but I was now the medium of the show. Now, I just had to release my tensions and just be an excellent narrator.
When it comes to challenges, the human spirit will not fail most time. I am no exception to this. Even though I am nervous that I will embarrass myself in front of others, I push through the challenges with ambitions. I do not quit when things get hard, and I accept challenges thrown my way. Deep down, I know that I must start narrating the show and that not all this work was worth throwing away for a couple of imaginary butterflies. I think it is time to express another side of myself and really show others that I am capable of doing new things. I am glad that my teacher chose me to be the narrator for the performance because that experience helps define me as an individual with a hunger for winning. When I look back on that experience in 8th grade I hardly remember the times when my fear prevented me from achieving goals I longed for; rather, I cherish my 8th grade year as a valued gift I have used for better. Every time I am on stage, I start to remember the hardships I have gone through and realize that overcoming fear enables me to identify my talents and work with them consistently. I know that being a narrator could be challenging and maybe even devastating, - but I made it.
If life is a game, quitting will mean my life is over. The only way to get through and win is to try harder and never give up. I look back at the times I gave up, deeply regretting them every second I remember them and swear never to stop chasing after what I want. Whether it is a 5-hour SAT exam that needs to be done, or a long-term paper that needs to be finished the next day, I will not give up no matter what, until I reach my target. I will not permit myself to lose because a confident person with ambition never loses. My 8th grade performance taught me this.
Italicized = past tense ( what i thought)
normal = present ( what i think)
Thank you!!!! Please make corrections and give suggestions!! =D