Penn offers its undergraduates an eminent faculty and a wealth of research opportunities. Use the space below to name a Penn professor with whom you would like to study or conduct research and explain why. (1000 characters)
The lack of meticulous memorization, mystifying equations and universal laws that define existence initially propelled me to enrol in IB HL Economics; devoid of any real knowledge. When I learnt that it encompassed a synthesis of math and science and addressed reality, I fell in love with the subject. The prowess of the UPenn faculty and its vast resources can foster this passion and manifest it into knowledge and insight.
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Good enough? This is simply amazing. I felt that you really portrayed your interest of studying IB HL Economics and meeting with Prof. Diebold. Your interest seemed real and you seem to know what you are talking about. You did what you aimed for.
Good luck.
this is a good piece this sentence "With published works such as "Volatility Forecasting" and "Micro Effects of Macro Announcements", his expertise in econometrics, financial economics, and macroeconomics parallel my areas of interest - which I have pursued through the IB extended essay and several written commentaries." seemed a little too long. I tried to help change it but i dont know if it makes it better.
hope this helps and best of luck!
You could delete the first part of the essay without really losing anything: "The lack of meticulous memorization, mystifying equations and universal laws that define existence initially propelled me to enrol in IB HL Economics; devoid of any real knowledge. When I learnt that it encompassed a synthesis of math and science and addressed reality, I fell in love with the subject. The prowess of the UPenn faculty and its vast resources can foster this passion and manifest it into knowledge and insight. If given the opportunity . . ." None of this is really relevant to the prompt. You could then use the extra room you will have to go into more detail about what aspects of Diebold's work, specifically, you would like to work on with him.
thanks everyone!
@EF_Sean
I was debating that also but the prompt says "why" you would like to work with this professor. i thought that explaining why im interested subject wise would contribute to the why i want to study with him portion.
*below is my edited version: i tried to make it flow better and make it clearer. please any input is appreciated*
I intially enrolled into IB HL Economics for its superficial appeal; the lack of meticulous memorization and mystifying equations. But when I learnt that it encompassed a synthesis of math and science and addressed a tangible reality that was both engaging and urgent, I fell in love with the subject. I'm confident that the prowess of the UPenn faculty and its vast resources can mould this passion into knowledge and insight. If given the opportunity, I would be honoured to study and conduct research with Professor Francis X. Diebold. With published works such as "Volatility Forecasting" and "Micro Effects of Macro Announcements", his expertise in econometrics, financial economics, and macroeconomics parallel my areas of interest - which I have pursued through the IB extended essay and several written commentaries. Like Mr. Diebold, I too am fascinated by the correlation between micro and macroeconomics and studying under his instruction would be the pinnacle of my education at UPenn.
Nice job! Just a quick fix for the end:
Like Mr. Diebold, I too am fascinated by the correlation between micro and macroeconomics and studying under his instruction would be the pinnacle of my education at UPenn.
It's redundant to say, "like him, I too..."
thank you so much! really appreciated
its learned not learnt
what you have is extremely well written but you dont mention anything specific about his research that interested you
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