I am a sophomore in high school and I am currently applying to the North Carolina School of Science and Mathematics (NCSSM for short). For those of you who don't know, NCSSM is a residential high school for juniors and seniors in Durham, NC. It is highly selective and part of the application process requires writing an essay. I have written a rough draft, and I would appreciate anyone who read through it and took the time to comment and offer suggestions. Thanks a lot to everyone who helps out.
NCSSM is a community to which all members contribute. It is also a community in which all members benefit. Write an essay about yourself, describing the special abilities, skills, and experiences that qualify you for admission. Be sure to describe the contributions you will make to the school and how both the academic and residential experience will enhance your development as a scholar and as a person.
My name is Kalyan Rao and I am a sophomore at D.H. Conley High School in Greenville, NC. I first found out about the School of Science and Math several years ago through a longtime family friend who chose to attend. Since then, I have become convinced that NCSSM would be a good fit for my goals and personality. Allow me to explain what I would contribute to NCSSM and how it can enrich my character.
I hope to gain many things by attending NCSSM. One important factor in my decision to apply was the many course offerings of NCSSM. Although my high school, Conley, is a superb school, there are much more varied and fascinating courses at NCSSM. I want to be able to take courses that suit my interests, such as philosophy, robotics, and economics, which Conley is currently unable to offer.
More significantly, though, I want to be part of a school where I can grow as a person and be able to come out different than I went in. Such experiences are few and far between, and their memories can last a lifetime.
One such memory for me was the time I had my upanayanam in India. The upanayanam is a rite of passage for Hindu boys. During the ceremony, the youngster is taught the nature of God. He becomes a student of God and is then recognized as someone who will try to educate themselves and realize God individually for the rest of their life. My upanayanam was held the summer before my seventh grade, on the hills above the holy city of Tirupati. There I felt much more mature and responsible than I had ever felt before. I realized that I would always be a different person, and I hope for the same kind of powerful life-changing experience at NCSSM.
Just as there are many things that NCSSM can do for me, I can do much to help complement the community of NCSSM. One thing I can add to the school is my talent for the saxophone. I have been playing it since the sixth grade, and I love it more and more each year. When I visited for open house, I was impressed with the jazz band that was outside in the courtyard. I felt impressed with the level of music they were playing and wanted to be a part of that program. I find that playing my instrument is very rewarding and I certainly want to take part in many ensembles if I attend.
Another quality that would benefit NCSSM is my passion for community service. There is an old Hindu saying that I took deeply to heart the moment I first heard it: "Service to humanity is service to God." In accordance with this spirit, I have served as a volunteer for many different places, such as the library, Sylvan Learning Center, and Pitt County Memorial Hospital. At Sylvan, I was the first volunteer ever accepted, and I found it to be a memorable experience. At the Hospital, I worked it Central Transport to escort patients home and around the hospital. When the patients saw that they were about to go back home, their happiness was priceless.
These are some of the reasons why I will be a good candidate for NCSSM. I will have the opportunity to take captivating courses and become a better person. I will be a talented, multifaceted, charitable student, and I will work to be an active member of the community. I feel that NCSSM would be a good fit for me.
Some things I would appreciate input on:
-The length (Too long/short), etc.
-Was it involving or boring?
-Did it sound genuine?
-And anything else you can comment on.
Once again, thanks a lot!