I need help with grammar and elaborating please help!!! I need you guys to critique this like crazy
Consider the following scenario: You've been given the unique opportunity to create a brand new course to be offered at Pepperdine University. You have complete autonomy over the course topic, as well as how and where the course curriculum will be presented. What course would you create and how will it contribute to the academic and co curricular experience at the University? (300 words or less)
Welcome to "Reporting like Ron"; a journalism course at Pepperdine University inspired by the hit blockbuster movie series "Anchorman". Ron Burgundy, the main character of the movie, is a famous anchorman from a San Diego news station. Burgundy is known for his salon quality hair and cutting edge reporting. He believed that reporting on what people needed to hear was boring and that news should be fun. In his second movie, he changed journalism, as we know it by reporting about why Americans should be proud of being Americans, as well as reporting the very first live car chase. In this class we will be focusing on our skills as creative reporters and how we report, rather than the actual news. We will focus on honing our skills that will help us think "outside of the box", by reporting on local news. This will help us become more familiar our environment. By reporting news occurring in our own area, we will be eliminating any extra steps that involve becoming familiar with the area, people and culture. This will help focus more on the story and presenting it in a more creative manner. We hope that the students will be able to use the skills they acquire in this course, throughout their college career and even in everyday life. In "Reporting like Ron" we strive to open our student's mind and create a more creative learning environment, every idea is welcome as well as supportive criticism.
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Welcome to "Reporting like Ron"; a journalism course at Pepperdine University inspired by the hit blockbuster movie series "Anchorman". Ron Burgundy, the main character of the movie, is a famous anchorman from a San Diego news station. Burgundy is known for his salon quality hair and cutting edge reporting. He believes that reporting what people need to hear is boring and that news should be fun. In his second movie, he changes journalism, as we know it by reporting about why Americans should be proud of being Americans, as well as reporting the very first live car chase. In this class we will be focusing on our skills as creative reporters, rather than the news itself. We will be reporting on local news and focusing on honing the skills that will help us think "outside of the box". By reporting news occurring in our own area, we will be eliminating any extra steps that involve becoming familiar with the area, people and culture. This will help focus more on the story and presenting it in a more creative way. The course will give students a break from their more rigorous courses and co curricular experiences. This will also give them a chance to stimulate the more creative half of their brain. We hope that this course will also help them in courses throughout their academic career and in everyday life. In "Reporting like Ron" we strive to open our student's mind and create a more creative learning environment, every idea is welcome as well as supportive criticism.
I like your overall theme and idea. I think that you could improve your response by cutting out some of the summary information about "Anchorman" and write more about the significance of basing the course on the idea of "Anchorman". In my opinion, the sentence about the second movie seems unnecessary. My editing is just a suggestion and I think you did a great job overall. I hope my input is helpful!
Welcome to "Reporting like Ron"; a journalism course at Pepperdine University inspired by the hit blockbuster movie series "Anchorman". Ron Burgundy, the main character of the movie, is a famous anchorman from a San Diego news station. Burgundy is known for his salon quality hair and cutting edge reporting. He believes that reporting what people need to hear is boring and that news should be fun. In his second movie, he changes journalism, as we know it by reporting about why Americans should be proud of being Americans, as well as reporting the very first live car chase . In this class we will be focusing on our skills as creative reporters, rather than the news itself. We will be reporting on local news and focusing(maybe a different word than focusing since you used in it the previous sentence) on honing the skills that will help us think "outside of the box." By reporting news occurring in our own area, local news, we will be eliminating (eliminate)any extra steps that involve becoming familiar with the area, people and culturefamiliarization. . This will help us focus more on the story and presenting it in a more creative way. The course will give students a break from their more rigorous courses and co curricular experiences. This will also give them a chance to stimulate the more creative half of their brain. We hope that this course will also help them in courses throughout their academic career and in everyday life. In "Reporting like Ron" we strive to open our student's mind and create a more creative learning environment, every idea is welcome as well as supportive criticism.
I think you answered the prompt very well! I really love the originality and creativity of your answer! I'm a huge fan of the Anchorman movies lol!
You answered every part of the prompt. I didn't see any major grammatical errors.
All the changes I made are below. If I made any changes that you think might be incorrect, let me know as my knowledge of the English language is quite limited.
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