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prompt- "Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how has your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."
Throughout my high school career, one of my main goals was to help others, and to be more specific, give back to my community. Living in one of the safest cities in the nation, Temecula, I have realized that this city has done more than enough for me. Now it is my duty to insure everyone in my community receives the same level of satisfaction from Temecula as I did.
In my second year of high school, I registered myself as a Special Olympics volunteer for tennis. Watching and assisting each athlete, I became humbled. I realized the joy in helping others less fortunate than me. Immediately I knew I wanted to do more for the organization and as a result, enlisted in another season as a Special Olympics volunteer. Being a certified scuba diver and lifeguard, I knew I could best help mentally challenged children learn how to swim. From both seasons of Special Olympics, I learned the importance and satisfaction of helping intellectually disabled children within my community.
Having somewhat successful academics, I found myself motivated to share this success with others. As a junior, I came upon a free tutoring program at the Temecula Public Library. Volunteering at the library, I got the chance to help children ranging from high school to elementary school. The children I helped were not the only ones that were learning. Seeing each child completely focused on learning made me more motivated to learn as well.
As a senior, my loyalty to a few clubs over the years had paid off. I was fortunate enough to be appointed as vice president of Earth Club and treasurer of Key Club. Both of these clubs are fully dedicated to the community and provide community service to the members at their events. As a leader, I learned dedication, creativity, and openness. Fulfilling the leadership position for Earth Club and Key Club I learned to be absolutely devoted to my role in the clubs. I also discovered I must be able to create new ideas as well as be open to new concepts as they are presented to me. Through serving as Earth Club's vice president and Key Club's treasurer, I believe I am closer to achieving my ultimate goal of giving back to my community.
As a citizen of Temecula, I believe it is my duty to give back to the community. Over my high school career, I have made this my personal goal and strived to achieve it. Moving away to college next year, I plan on implying this same concept and being well involved in their community.
prompt- "Describe the world you come from - for example, your family, community or school - and tell us how has your world has shaped your dreams and aspirations."
Throughout my high school career, one of my main goals was to help others, and to be more specific, give back to my community. Living in one of the safest cities in the nation, Temecula, I have realized that this city has done more than enough for me. Now it is my duty to insure everyone in my community receives the same level of satisfaction from Temecula as I did.
In my second year of high school, I registered myself as a Special Olympics volunteer for tennis. Watching and assisting each athlete, I became humbled. I realized the joy in helping others less fortunate than me. Immediately I knew I wanted to do more for the organization and as a result, enlisted in another season as a Special Olympics volunteer. Being a certified scuba diver and lifeguard, I knew I could best help mentally challenged children learn how to swim. From both seasons of Special Olympics, I learned the importance and satisfaction of helping intellectually disabled children within my community.
Having somewhat successful academics, I found myself motivated to share this success with others. As a junior, I came upon a free tutoring program at the Temecula Public Library. Volunteering at the library, I got the chance to help children ranging from high school to elementary school. The children I helped were not the only ones that were learning. Seeing each child completely focused on learning made me more motivated to learn as well.
As a senior, my loyalty to a few clubs over the years had paid off. I was fortunate enough to be appointed as vice president of Earth Club and treasurer of Key Club. Both of these clubs are fully dedicated to the community and provide community service to the members at their events. As a leader, I learned dedication, creativity, and openness. Fulfilling the leadership position for Earth Club and Key Club I learned to be absolutely devoted to my role in the clubs. I also discovered I must be able to create new ideas as well as be open to new concepts as they are presented to me. Through serving as Earth Club's vice president and Key Club's treasurer, I believe I am closer to achieving my ultimate goal of giving back to my community.
As a citizen of Temecula, I believe it is my duty to give back to the community. Over my high school career, I have made this my personal goal and strived to achieve it. Moving away to college next year, I plan on implying this same concept and being well involved in their community.